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I liked how much you emphasized how the relationship that had happened between Baekhyun and Chanyeol has affected them throughout their lives in the present time in the story.
Dislikes
I didn’t dislike anything about the story.
“PrileX” asked to comment on a possible change in the title of the story.
I don’t believe a change in the title is necessary because you have shown through the plot so far that both Baekhyun and Chanyeol have thought that their relationship and falling in love with each other was a mistake.
“PrileX” asked to comment on any improvement needed for the plot of the story.
There isn’t anything that needs to be improved yet as you only have three chapters written so far. As more chapters are written, then you’ll be able to see a clear path that you would like to take in writing your story. So far, it is very interesting, and I am very intrigued on finding out what exactly Baekhyun needs to explain to Chanyeol but hasn’t gotten the chance to.
Anything else I could comment on
Be careful when using the phrase “said man.” It was a little hard to distinguish who you were referring to when using that phrase to describe someone. Technical note: In chapter two, you refer to Sehun as Kai’s best friend, but later use “hu
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