Chapter 3: I love the idea of this fic but there is just one thing that is bothering me. It reads like a surmised version of what needs to be a more detailed story. If you take each sentence and try to extend it by three-five more sentences, turning one sentence into a paragraph then your story will have more depth. Try to be as detailed as possible. So far we don't know what is happening around Inha, what this dream world looks like, sounds like, smells like, and feels like. You need to describe everything about everything so we can see it clearly like we'e there. You also need to describe what Inha looks like, Jongsuk and Kangchul too. They might have long dark hair or short dark hair, or even auburn hair, flaxen hair, oakre hair. It could be bristly hair or soft shiny hair, matte hair. There are so many words you could use to create this wonderful world you've come up with, so do your best to use them. Use the internet to search them and keep a dictionary by your side at all times. Use your words love.