Chapter 2: oh la la... lol :P

Chapter 1: Cute little story for sure. I liked it. IT takes me back to when I first became a member on AFF.

If you want to writing tips you can read this. Otherwise just read my message above and that's it. It's all to help you become an even better writer :D
1: I noticed you're not very good at past tense words, like kissed, left, screamed, etc. Try learning more about the past versions of those words. It will help elevate your writing to a new level I can assure you.

2: Try writing more description. Saying someone is a hot is fine, but describing that hot guy will enforce the reader's imagination to visualize this hot guy. Try writing a paragraph with your bias describing a location. Every paragraph is a new sense. What does he hear, then what does he smell, what does he feel on his skin, what does he taste, and what does he see. If you manage to put all senses in your story it will be riveting to read.

3: Try and get Grammarly for Chrome. It fixes so many mistakes Word doesn't. It's a real life saver, even for someone who is fairly good at English.

If you want any other tips or what to have a chat about your writing you can always reach me on AFF. I can also proofread your story for you if you want. Feedback is very important to become better at any skill.

Chapter 1: Eyyy naughty Taemin hahahaha.. I like this, sometimes we need to read Taemin to be the one who flirt with Minho ㅋㅋㅋ

Chapter 1: Eyyy naughty Taemin hahahaha.. I like this, sometimes we need to read Taemin to be the one who flirt with Minho ㅋㅋㅋ

Chapter 1: cute story.. I love the ending XD

Chapter 1: Haha that last sentence was so cute!! Cute fic <3