Had Me At Hello

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Description

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When I first moved into my apartment, my neighbors were a sweet, older couple. They would deliver homemade treats to the entire building and greet everyone warmly in the elevators. After three years, they moved out and a young dancer next door replaced them. He plays music all day and throughout the night, though the other residents have never complained.

One day, I finally did.

Who would've ever imagined that one simple exchange between two strangers would have such an effect on my heart?

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"A simple hello could lead to a million things."

Foreword

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Yoon Sohyun || Apartment 8A

Kim Jongin aka Kai || Apartment 8C

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• Written for vanillasushi's BLOSSOM ROADS; a one-shot entry contest

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This story has been edited. Musically paired with f(x)’s “All Mine.” I do not own any of these photos. All rights go to the original owners.

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Fariemma #1
Chapter 1: Its cute and relatable and gosh i felt giddy the whole way reading this!! Thanks a lot and you write wonderfully!
vampwrrr
#2
Chapter 1: This was the cutest!
warmpenguin
#3
i love your writing style! it's descriptive and nice.

thank you for writing!
-natsukim #4
Chapter 1: Auwww the ending makes me thinking it should a sequel for this. I’m so curious with Kai!
BaekHyun-Luver
#5
Chapter 1: Cuteness overload >< In love with the story! <3
x169618x #6
Chapter 1: They're cute and i wanna tease them if i was there XD sehun got a good sense of time, eh? XD
wawkrysticbaby
#7
Chapter 1: I thought it was funny when Sehun realized what was going on between them and took off knowing they wanted to be more than just friends. It was a good read! :)
vanillasushi
#8
Chapter 1: I appreciate how short this is, especially since I have so many stories to read haha. And I think it's so funny how OC could recognise Sehun's laughter HAHAHAHAHA like what are the chances!!!

Your grammar is perfect and paragraphing is really neat. The start was a little... long(?) though. Like you were introducing a little bit too much; I think it would have been better to SHOW the readers what you mean before you start the introductions/explanations. There also wasn't much character or plot development in this one shot considering how short this is, but it'd be really good if you could build the plot a little bit more because it would then make the readers feel more attached to the story and the characters. Other than that, I don't think I have anymore critiques.

Thank you for joining Blossom Roads! I hope you enjoyed writing this as much as we all enjoyed reading it. And I hope my comment helps; whether in motivating you to write more or to improve in your future works. Good luck!

Xoxo
alexajjang
#9
Chapter 1: So cute! :3