ROUND 1 Archive - Winners and Entries
Think Outside the Box - Oneshot Writing Contest [2nd ROUND OPEN!]
(this review contains spoiler, if you want to not know the plot of this story, don’t highlight this section) Even from the poster I’m intrigued LOL. Never would’ve imagined an official oh my girl photoshoot could look that menacing. Although I think your poster kind of played you in the wrong way, because I knew something was wrong with Binnie after looking at the poster.
I LOVE YOUR STORY THOUGH. You write your character really nicely. They feel real and with depth and they’re just intriguing. The way you describe your environment also lends to a really rich imagery and atmosphere of the surroundings and it’s great 10/10
I love the tragicness of your plot and ofc, the battle of light and dark is as old as time itself, but you melded it into your own little thing and I really enjoyed it. And I also really love your setup-payoff scheme because tbh i know it’s not sherlock holmes level of deduction but I just love it when seemingly mundane things are explained the further along you go into the plot.
One critique I have is that I felt the story was kind of rushed during its third act. I feel that if you add another section of bonding time, maybe Binnie meeting with Yewon? Or just something to further delve into the relationship of Binnie and Jiho, it would’ve make the revelation at the much more impactful. But overall a really solid read! I felt like I was watching an episode of a cop-thriller TV drama. >>end of review. Please comment down at the comment section and tell me three of your stories for me to subscribe & upvote.
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Man your writing is immaculate and I love it so much it’s like being into some sort of vortex?? I can SEE the sets and feel the atmosphere and just enjoy the story. It’s really magical. And the plot just fell together like a puzzle and the character relationship is just so tangible and i love it man I really do.
I have to read this three times because when I first read it I was kindda sleepy and didn’t want to turn my brain and only wiki-ed and blitzed through the prisoner’s game explanation (I really love how you incorporate the philosophical aspect into the story and its relationship with the Samson tale in the bible and just wowzers), but I just love the painting you did there with your words. Solid work, A+, 10/10, very enjoyable.
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UGH I LOVE THIS. tbh hoseok and taehyung’s plotline is just everything. I love the unravelling of the mystery of Jungkook’s life and his relationship with Jin was just really nicely done. And Jin was written really interestingly and wow I was just super intrigued by him it’s a very solid piece??
I love your commentary of ‘IRL live as we know it’ in this magical world and I do admit sometimes it felt a bit ham fisted and a bit too blatant but I don’t really mind that too much. It’s still a good commentary nevertheless.
PS: Your writing style is GOOD MAN wow I’m just blown away
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I feel that you kind of over explained the predicaments of your characters, especially at the beginning. (Thankyou for explaining all about the physics stuff though, because I at physics so much LOL although the bit where he figured out the equation for time travel is a bit of a cop out imo…)
Although, I love you for not explaining what happened at the very end of the story because now I’m just trying to find out how is there two of them in two different time (and I love mysteries). This story has a great potential. With grammar checks or editor or a beta reader, your story would’ve been a very enjoyable read. It has that sweet glow of good potential. I also love Jin and the female lead’s relationship, I think it’s really cute.
You said to find something odd in the story and honestly, I don’t know?? Is it combining the lyrics of Samson and Just One Day? Please tell me the answer LOL.
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Bad guy good guy dynamic is my favourite LOL. I think this is a very enjoyable read, I love the emotional build up of the story, it’s really pretty. But the plot is pretty standard and predictable. Not that it’s a bad thing, I personally don’t really like anxiety inducing plot and I think this is a good light read.
I really love your epilogue though, I read it when I needed some sort of message of goodness and I have to thankyou for that!
To be honest this is totally my style of story. I would’ve enjoyed it if I’ve built a previous mental connection with the pairing (eg, a popular pairing or characters from a movie/tv show). But as is, I didn’t feel any sympathy to the characters, which caused me to not really respond with anything when things happened to them. It’s a nice short piece though, and with better eye on grammar check, your writing style would’ve been very beautiful.
Medieval intrigue should’ve intrigued me but… I feel that your story is too riddled with mysteries that are not answered that it left me… feeling lost. I know not everything has to be explained to the reader and a bit of unanswered questions that are left to be pondered are always a good thing, but too much of that and you risk making your story look like it’s incomplete.
I like the dynamic between Yoongi and Jin, though, and your writing style is really enjoyable to read. It’s a good piece but I do really wish I’d have more to read!
Oh god when you name drop Trump I couldn’t help but laugh. A story filled with female, gay as hell spies and Trump got a name drop. I love it.
I was a bit distracted by the numerous POV shift. Well, I mean I can keep up, but just be mindful to not shift between first and third POV because it’ll just make your story look unpolished. And the story in overall is also pretty confusing? Like I don’t really understand the ‘why’ of the characters Why they do the things they do? The plot is a but too weak for my liking and there were too many unnecessary cameos that I was just feeling overwhelmed. But with a bit of work and strengthening of the story foundation, I’m sure this will be a fun, super ghey spy action story.
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