I have no idea what am i doing. This is my absolute first time in writing. I am always waiting around for a fic to be updated but it never does and i thought why not try writing one myself.
Chapter 2: Aww. Its finished already? Too bad. I was hoping it would be longer. Its super cute. Congrats for finishing your first fic. Hahah. And updating does takes a lot of work, especially if you are a busy person irl. Oh, and you should add chaekyul to your tag. Thx for the update. Pls do get crazy again and write more chaekyul. Hahah.
Chapter 1: Agree with the comments below. It's already good for a very first chapter you've ever written in life lols please continue! And yes make them longer and easier to read, maybe make the writing not too casual but not too formal :)
Chapter 1: A good start. And its a nice format. Easy to read and not confusing. A tip from me would probabbly to use justify. Make the reading experience nicer or maybe i just like to see pharagraph in nice even lines. I would prefer it to be longer though. But fantastic job so far :)
Story wise i didnt find anything that bother me much. And it seems like its gonna be cute, so i like it.
Pls do continue.
Chapter 1: It's a good first chapter! You set up the story nicely.
Now I'm wondering whether you'll continue this as Chaeyeon not having understood her and Jieqiong dismissing it/saying sth else, or if you're gonna have Chaeyeon be aware of Jieqiong's crush and write them being awkward around each other.
Looking forwards to the next update.
(one thing that did strike me as a little strange when I read it, is that everything is in Jieqiong's POV except this line "The other IOI members quickly noticed the awkward situations between them and started Operation Chaekyul. Which the first thing they had to do was to be handcuffed to each other for 24 hours." doesn't seem to fit into that. Before and after that it's clearly Jieqiong's experiences/thoughts, but that one line I couldn't fit in.)
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