01.

I am crazy

“Are you sleeping?” Chaeyeon whips her head towards the source of the voice.

“No” she replies as she flips over on her side to find Jieqiong staring lifelessly at the celling. “Is something bothering you?”

 “Unnie” Jieqiong turns overs and sees the Goddess herself looking at her. “I..”

“Ahhh its nothing! Never mind. Goodnight unnie” Jieqiong murmurs as she shakes her head frantically, leaving Chaeyeon puzzled at Jieqiong’s sudden randomness. Chaeyeon hums in reply and greets her goodnight. She drifts off to slumber quickly while Jieqiong continued to toss and turn till the crack of dawn then finally manages to close her eyes.

“JIEQIONG TIME TO GO! WE’RE LATE” Jieqiong hears Nayoung yell from the other room. She opens her eyes feeling groggy from what seemed to be a 10-minute nap. She turns over to find Chaeyeon’s bed empty already.

“JIEQIONG” She sits up and groans loudly at the approaching leader. “Alright alright COMINGGGGG”

Jieqiong steps into van, giving an apologetic glance to their leader as she was the last to get ready again for the hundredth time this month. She looks around timidly looks around for an untaken seat and mentally curses at herself for not getting ready faster. Chaeyeon was seating with Yoojung again. Not that she hates Yoojung or anything, Yoojung is such an adorable bub but the way she manages to hog up all of Chaeyeon attention so easily makes her feel all shades of sour and bitter inside. While Jieqiong on the other hand has tried countless of time to get closer with Chaeyeon but after each time, things get more awkward than before.

It was not too bad initially but as time passes, the words exchanged between them got lesser.  The other IOI members  noticed the awkward situations between them and started Operation Chaekyul. Which the first task was to be roommates. Jieqiong cringes hard at thought where she tried so many times to start a conversation but only received one word replies. She steals one final glance and Yoojung was snuggling to the crook of her neck. She mentally curses herself again and notes to get ready faster the next time.

She plops down on the empty seat next to Sohye. Jieqiong glanced over and saw a pair of wide open eyes staring back. Jieqiong took this opportunity to complain to the resident penguin about how she was not able to sleep well the night before.

“Unnie unnie. You are becoming a bicycle” Sohye gasped. “Because you are too tired all the time   HAHAHA” Jieqiong vows to get ready faster.

Later that night Jieqiong opens the door cautiously to their shared room, not wanting to wake her up also to avoid another awkward conversation. However, she does find her roommate scrolling her phone in the darkness. The way the brightness from her phone lights up her face and her eyes look like they are shining, makes Jieqiong swear that she is looking at an angel right now.

“Jieqiong? Are you okay? You wanted to talk to me yesterday?” The angel said.

“ImsorrybutwhydoIlikeyousomuchinthewayIshouldnot” Jieqiong blurts.

 

PS. IDK how to do this omg pls comment and tell me what you think about this pleasseeee i need to know if im on the right track or not

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jetiunique
#1
Chapter 2: <3<3 jieqiong lmao being rejected harshly straight on the face by the youngest xD
DianaNguyen #2
Chapter 2: heck that was cute but too short!
blessyfnp #3
Chapter 2: Oh God.... why so short stories, you should make it longer tbh
crazygamelover
#4
Chapter 2: Aww. Its finished already? Too bad. I was hoping it would be longer. Its super cute. Congrats for finishing your first fic. Hahah. And updating does takes a lot of work, especially if you are a busy person irl. Oh, and you should add chaekyul to your tag. Thx for the update. Pls do get crazy again and write more chaekyul. Hahah.
astaga1990 #5
Chapter 1: Agree with the comments below. It's already good for a very first chapter you've ever written in life lols please continue! And yes make them longer and easier to read, maybe make the writing not too casual but not too formal :)
crazygamelover
#6
Chapter 1: A good start. And its a nice format. Easy to read and not confusing. A tip from me would probabbly to use justify. Make the reading experience nicer or maybe i just like to see pharagraph in nice even lines. I would prefer it to be longer though. But fantastic job so far :)
Story wise i didnt find anything that bother me much. And it seems like its gonna be cute, so i like it.
Pls do continue.
MinhaKang
#7
Chapter 1: It's a good first chapter! You set up the story nicely.
Now I'm wondering whether you'll continue this as Chaeyeon not having understood her and Jieqiong dismissing it/saying sth else, or if you're gonna have Chaeyeon be aware of Jieqiong's crush and write them being awkward around each other.
Looking forwards to the next update.
(one thing that did strike me as a little strange when I read it, is that everything is in Jieqiong's POV except this line "The other IOI members quickly noticed the awkward situations between them and started Operation Chaekyul. Which the first thing they had to do was to be handcuffed to each other for 24 hours." doesn't seem to fit into that. Before and after that it's clearly Jieqiong's experiences/thoughts, but that one line I couldn't fit in.)
astaga1990 #8
LOL at the description and foreword. Looking forward!