It was cute. He came off edgy, hot, and like any tattoo artist would be until you really see him for him, an awkward boy who just came of age. Very well written.... until...

My biggest conatructive criticism to you: it ended so horribly abrupt and I really disliked that. I hope you choose to redo the ending because even one sentence could wrap it up, if you select it right. It's disappointing, but only because you started off a rockin story. Did you rush the end? Or were you unsure of how to conclude the vignette? I don't mean to discourage you, but it was so powerful and then all of a sudden, you stopped in a part that left me wondering if I read "completed" at the top of the pge incorrectly. I didn't, which made me frustrated.

That was the only issue, though. Everything else was incredible and I hope to read more of your work. Good job.

I love it omg.

Chapter 6: This is so cute :)