Chapter 1: Lovely story of yours. TOO SWEET OF BTS MEMBERS! Great storyline and effort! Look forward for more stories from you. Good job! Hwaiting!

Chapter 1: THIS IS JUST SO ADORABLE!!!!! (>/////<) if Bangtan ever had a female best friend this is probably how their holiday would be like
PS: i suggest you work on grammar a little, expecially on tenses, sometimes you cannot fully understand the exact time/course of the story; try not to use both 1st and 3rd person when narrating, sometimes is confusing; also try to organize your sentences, sometimes you have too much description or 'actions' in just one sentence, other times you don't stop one idea in one sentence and continue with another one, which makes the sentence too long
PS2: please take this as POSITIVE criticism, i really enjoyed your story and i'm sure you can do better
well done and good luck with future stories. ^^

Im glade you are sharing it ^_^