Dirty Little Secret

AUTHOR: chariseuma 

Title : [5/5]

The title was very apt and it suited your story very much. It’s also intriguing and one would want to know just what the secret is. So, good job! :)

Foreword/ Description : [12/15]

The description is a bit… unsuitable, to be honest. It should have been a bit more refined. I noticed it’s actually an extract from the story. Perhaps you could have just written a bit of Mark and Iseul’s background in the description and you could have hinted at what was going to happen in the story. The words you’ve used are too blunt and let us know under what circumstance they’ll do the deed. This could have actually made you lose a number of potential subscribers (highly possible in cases where the story has been recommended by their friends), because they already have an idea of what is going to happen. As far as the foreword is concerned, it’s very good. You provided the readers with a teaser and I must admit, I felt that shiver of anticipation when I read that part.

Plotline : [11/15]

The layout you used is very pretty. :) The plot was certainly unique in a way since we don’t have much stories, with the leads being best friends. That’s where I think you messed up a bit. You clearly said they were best friends. You should have emphasised more on their feelings towards each other. Also, despite this being a forbidden act between best friends, provided