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TITLE: Snow White and the Seven Sins 
REVIEWER: CriticReviews 
AUTHOR: TheSociableIntrovert 
OUR RATING FOR STORY: M []

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Title: 10/10 [Snow White and her Seven Sins] 
I love the way you took the original fairytale title (Snow White and the Seven Dwarves) and made it more menacing and horrific! It would simply catch a certain group of peoples' eye, it has this impression that it's a real thriller, it's one of the best titles I have ever seen on Asianfanfics. 

Description: 20/20
Excellent description, I especially like how you show the 'voice in her head' in italics whilst writing in third person, it really shows the emotions that Dara is feeling. There's no lack in description, like I always say; 
Not too much and not too little 
Description should be balanced out so that it doesn't either get short and boring or too long and tiring to read. The only thing I'd ask you to improve in is to use more complex sentence and take use of dashes, other than that, no problem here! 

Character Development: 18/20 
Dara is a character you'd get to understand straight away, this is a good thing but at the same time I feel the need to tell you to take it slow (not too slow) when introducing new characters, you did this perfectly in the 1st chapter when introducing 'Tabachoy', we knew her name was Mabeth and that she was mean, what I don't like see