Chapter 22: Aaaah Somi..Somi Somi Somi :(
I think my fav part in this chapter would be when they got to Narshe. You set everything so well it’s like we’re there in person XD also it kinda reminds me of some parts of Rise of the Tomb Raider.
Noooooooooooo Wendy whyyyyyyyy????
Chapter 22: Oh man you have combined 2 of my favorite things: K-Pop and Final Fantasy! The way the story flows really feels like a final fantasy game- grand world spanning epics, complex characters, and impractical clothing xD. Seriously, someone needs to get Seulgi out of that tux and into some armor. You make each character so delightfully flawed and you refuse to make them one dimensional. Even Leeteuk, who should just be a mustache twirling villain, comes off as a person falling to madness during what few flash backs he's had. Everyone feels like they live in this world and I'm so excited to see where it goes from here, especially if Wendy is in fact dead.
Chapter 22: Legit that was awesome - I just feel this needs to be published when it’s finished. I don’t care that it’s a fanfic it’s ing amazing and it deserves to be published and read by so many. Please write and continue to write. You are so talented - and you’ve read my other comments you know how great I think this book is. But you don’t have a bad chapter. It’s constantly engaging and I always wait for your updates. Once again, can’t wait to see where it goes. Hoping Wendy isn’t dead, the poor soul. But very much enjoyed the tender Seulgi and Irene moment. Can’t wait for the drama when Seulgi and Wendy meet (mild evil laugh).
Chapter 22: I had a chain of emotions between the beginning and a Yooa destroyed
then the moment Seulrene, full of sweetness but at the same time thoughtful and that lets us think about the future they could have and the difficulty for Irene to have a normal life when she never had this luxury.
(The moment Seulrene was really sweet and a perfect break in all this mess to soothe my heart before going back to history seriously. And their kiss was both pure and the first that really affirmed the feelings between them, even if they were conscious of it. But i know too much sweet thing with you mean hard thing after . )
the fight scene was magical, even if Leeteuk's arrogance makes me mad and see the power that three people can have on a group. And Irene who can not fight aaaaaaaaa >< but solji and yeri are pefect together hehe AND JOY IS REALLY A QUEEN
But the end ?? allo ?????? what happened ??? hello hello ?? moshi moshi ?? i was not ready ????
thank you for the update -insert blowing emoji-
Chapter 21: It made me feel a little sad to see how disconnected Wendy seems to be from her surroundings and the developments going on. The contrast in atmosphere between the first scene with Wendy and Eunji and the second scene with Joy and Yeri made me chuckle hard! So interesting to see Wendy wanting to learn how to fly the Sky Armor and then we have Yeri being a mess xD The humour is a nice touch to this chapter, in contrast to what happened to Somi, which is really unfortunate. Irene's really a commendable figure, being able to pilot the Sky Armor, but that's expected of her I guess, stepping up to her role. I enjoyed reading the details you wrote in the last scene, such as the description of the sea (which says a lot about Leeteuk) and what Leeteuk sees in the ship (it heightens the atmosphere and suspense at what would attract Leeteuk's attention). Thank you for this update! :)
Chapter 21: I wanted to leave a comment after this fic was over, but that felt miserly, as I'm already immensely enjoying this one so very much. (I've already showed my appreciation on twitter, but comment sections exist for a reason!)
To start off, I know nothing about the source material, but your writing is masterful enough to not require any understanding of the game this is based on. The world building, the gradual exposition, the character dynamics -- they're all handled so beautifully in this fic. I can't find a single flaw, and I'm very critical of the things I read, even when I don't mean to be.
I like how romance is not the main focus of this thing, and that it's being driven by a thought out narrative and arc. I also reaaaaaaally dig the Wendy/Irene aspect of the story. I can't put into words how much I love their dynamic, although I have a soft spot for Seulrene. I like that you also have Eunji in the mix, who I don't know much about in the real world (do we know any of them in the real world? lol), and the way you've shown us the Wenrene relationship from her POV.
If I started elaborating everything I liked about this story, I think I'd go over the word count of this fic. So I just want to conclude by thanking you for this work. I love it and I can't wait to see where this goes next.
(And maybe Seulrene get to kiss a bit more, too. Not gonna be too greedy about that, yet.)
Chapter 21: i have so many questions! and i hate how i played this part of the game so long ago that i can't remember exactly how it was supposed to be (i think there were some cranes involved in this part too??) but yeah anyway, i love wendy & eunji's scenes, there's this sense of loyalty and a deep level of trust + affection that seems kind of hard to replicate.. also lmfao @ joyri, i feel like their character dynamics are fun to explore.
now, somi's death... did she really just die like that? it seems a little bit suspicious so i won't believe it yet, but i guess we'll see in the future. keep up the good work!
Chapter 21: LMFAO the Satan twins are reminding me so much of Disney movies lolol the part where they were arguing about taking the wheel was like in Atlantis where Audrey and Dr Sweet were arguing about the saw “I THOUGHT YOU SAID THIS CAN SAW A FEMUR IN LESS THAN 30 SECONDS?!” “Less talking more sawing!”
Then there’s the Aladdin one from the preview you gave us on twitter and the part about the levers was so Emperor’s New Groove lolol “Pull the lever, Kronk!” /pulls/ “WRONG LEVER!!!!!” Ahhahahahahhaa
But ok..Somi??? Sweet, little Somi??? NOOOOOOOOO WHHHYYYY????
Chapter 21: Yes, yes, yes, yes! A favorite story by one of my favorite authors is back! I'll be anticipating where this story will go from here :D Great update by the way
Chapter 20: It was painful reading this. When Irene started killing the Mayor's family, I just went 'Holy !!!' but as I continued reading I got reminded that all Irene wants to do is to protect Wendy, and then later on this part was brought up, with the addition of the fact that they're both pawns in this whole game. It's nice seeing things from Eunji's perspective, as someone who works alongside Irene and then Eunji being able to see her in a different light from this period of close interaction. I enjoyed seeing how Irene works out the plans to get the city; it was very fun to read this part and we get to see how Irene thinks things through. Thank you for this! :)
Chapter 20: oh snap this one was a little bit rough/kind of hard to... digest...although i think it sets a great mood for the story. i'm not sure if it's preparing us for whatever's coming next but trust me, this is a really good and well written chapter, it seems very polished in terms of storytelling... not that your past chapters weren't good per sé but this one has quite a different feeling to it and i'm definitely seeing growth and improvement as a writer, especially in setting up a (strong emotional connection?) with the readers which i think might be necessary for the rest of the story... imo...
btw i looove how you're providing a deeper insight into strategy!! and also the character's background and motivation without uh.. forcing it too much upon us while expanding a world that could've been sooo much more in the game, but i guess the game itself was too advanced for it's time, audience and console generation so they had to keep it like that. i think you were worried about doing it justice but i promise you're doing much more than that and you should be really proud.
i'm INTRIGUED on wenseulrene+eunji this is gonna be good lmao
nnn i have so many thoughts i think i'm getting terribly attached to this story. i can only hope everyone else gets to play and finish the game someday
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