Title: 10/10

I feel like the title fits the story perfectly. He is the reflection. Even his dreams are reflections of the life on the other side of the mirror like he is living two lives, but technically one. It’s very plain, but sometimes, plain is the best because it can mean so much more.

Description and Forward: 5/10

The description and forward are nice, but I feel like they are lacking a bit of umph to them. Reading them was a going-through-the-motions kind of thing for me. It didn’t really hit me at like, “Dang, I want to read this story like none other right now.” I could understand them and they did tell me about the story, but it was short. It was the kind of prologue to the story that some would normally just skim through or skip in general.

Poster: 7/10

The poster was ok. It did fit the story, and I gave you points for that, and it also had a very nice font in the center, but like the description, it was also missing something. It was really bland for the story. I could get the whole reflection kind of thing where they are switched sides but the fact that it looks like there is a giant white bar in the center completely ruined it for me. It would have looked cool if maybe you put the reflections in a pond or something?

Characterization: 12/15

I like the characterization in this. The fact that you take the time to describe how the routine of it all is, and the relationships that the characters have for each other is also good, but I wish you could have gone into a little more depth with it so I knew what I was really reading about. This story is supposed to be angsty, but it doesn’t really feel like it.

Plot: 9/10

The plot is interesting. Having kind of an alternate universe is so out of the normal for me; I’ve never really heard of a story like that. I like the plot twist when Kai dies, and that Sehun still sees him in the mirror. It makes me wonder and ask a lot of questions, but not in a bad way. The feelings I start to get around chapter 4 is… oh my god I can’t even explain. I literally started crying. It has a really bittersweet ending, but it’s nice. I’m just going to assume he ends up with Jongin in heaven J There were some times when I wish you would add some more emotion into it (hence the 1 point missing) but it’s really nice. I had a few questions at the end, but I’m sure that was intentional. This was a great story.

Flow: 10/10

The flow of the story is very nice. It doesn’t cut off anywhere weirdly, and it all fits together. Well done!

Grammar and Spelling: 25/25

The grammer and spelling were perfect!!!!!

Bonus: 10/10

I give a 10/10 for the originality of the story. This is possibly the second best AU one shot I have ever read.

Comments: Great job! A few things could have been fixed, but what is done is done.

Score: 88/100