I have to write a childrens book and I want you guys to grade me (ex. 80%) and tell me what I should fix or what I should add or take out or whatever...

"Mommy!" The little boy screamed as he tried to hide his body under the linen covers. His mother walked into his bedroom and smiled softly.

"What's wrong?" She asked in a calming tone.

"The storm scared me..." the boy admitted bashfully. The thunder roared and the lighting struck outside causing the boy to wince and his mother to climb into bed with him and hold him.

"Don't worry about the storm honey, it's okay, I'm here." The little boy's mother began to his hair. There was a pounding on the window and and the boy clutched his mother's arm and closed his eyes.

"Don't let the monster get me!"

"It's just the wind making the branches look like monsters." He looked up at his mother who was smiling at him.

"Don't they scare you?"

"Of course, but when I was a child my mother would come a hold me and tell me not to be afraid. So I wasn't afraid."

"But the storm is scary."

"Just remember, rain's a part of how life goes, it makes the beautiful world that you see in the morning, and someday you'll be in here comforting your child during a storm." The mother kissed her son's forehead and held him close.

"Will you stay with me tonight?" The boy asked.

"Of course." She smiled as the boy fell into a deep slumber as the storm passed over and a beautiful rainbow shone the next day.

Is that good enough for a child?