Concept 10/10

I love love love it! It is very original which I love. I have never read anything like it and from reading the description I knew it was going to be interesting. Slight I fell in love with it even more. It has a deep story line which I love reading, the concept is great keep it up and I'm sure your story will do well. Good job. 


Characters 9/10
I haven't read much of your fic but I already love how your characters personality matches the characters. These characters aren't perfect, you have made you characters have a lot of imperfections which I truly enjoy reading. You captured the real essences of originality and I applaud you for that. 

Plot 8/10
Okay I haven't written much so far because I already think it is perfect as it is and I am just sharing with you my perspective of your story. Honestly your story is amazing, everything is well written and the concept is amazing. However, the plot has it's confusing bits. It took me a while to realize the point of the story and I hope you don't take it the wrong way but for me it was to long that I started to skim read it to the end. I love everything about it which is making this as my only concern. Other then that I believe that this is a good story, it isn't thoes clique stories, even though its based on romance and fluff, theres this beautiful message behind which I can see forming. Keep this up and I'm sure people would want to read it. 

English: 10/10 
I'm not sure if English is your first language but dang girl your English is good!!! I read your story and cried at how good your English is, the way you used the right words to describe the setting, correct grammar and YOU KNOW HOW TO GRAMMATICALLY WRITE!!! I'm not sure if this is edited as well but it is soo good. I'm proud, if I could give you more points I would. 

Writing style: 10/10 
Your writing style is amazing, I can feel the emotion with the right choice of words you continued to produce that emotion. I love how you portray the main girl as this girl who is debt with her struggles, it's not clique at all. Your writing style is impressive and because of that it has made your story readable and understandable. I love your writing style, keep it up :)

Overall 9/10 
Everything is perfect, it truly is I couldn't have written it better then myself. The concept is my favorite thing out of the whole story, it is original and very mysterious that I have to read more! Your writing style and your choice of characters is also amazing! However, I admit I had to read your description a few times to understand. It may have not be written well or I may have been sleep while reading it I honestly don't know. Like I said, at one point you lost me and it was the only first chapter. I don't know why but I had a hard time graphing your story, however I read the second chapter and automatically I was impressed how beautifully written this story is and suddenly the confusion was received and I started enjoying the fic. I admit some chapters are a bit long and draining so you may need to minimize on the descriptions. You have great descriptions which I forgot to write about but I notice that too much can be very draining so you have to find the balance of having enough to fulfill your readers in the story and not too much. Overall I enjoyed the story keep up the good work and I'm sure I you will do well :))