This story, silent words, was a oneshot written as an entry for the writing group I'm a part of. (don't judge :P)

The opening paragraph of any story needs to gain interest. It can either encourage one to move forward, or send them away, bored and unsatisfied. Your opening paragraph had a short, yet intriguing air about it. In the two lines given, we are already shown a ot about our main character's attitude and hobbies. The way you descirbed the atmosphere, sounds and sights was really well done.

Overall, the plot was good and strong. It wasn't so much full of unexpected twists and turns (though it didn't really lack in that area), but it had something that made you want to read on and on. The way that the interaction between the two leads is delayed adds to the excitement felt when the greeting is said, and also to the disappointments we gain along the way. If I was to critisise anything plotwise, it would be the abrupt-ness (?) of the conversation. I feel like all of those words, however good, could have been replaced with one, well thought through line. One that wasn't cliched and gave the story a new dimension (what the hell I sound like some sort of retard)

The characters were very much three dimensional, you could see a lot about their attitudes, likes and dislikes. The characterisation of the reader is very strong. We are told almost straight forward about ourselves. Taemin, on the other hand, is described in a way that gives us the need to infer to find out about him. He is mysterious for a long time in the beginning, and is labelled because of one feature, a technique which was used very well.

Wording in this wasn't faultless, but there was still an admirable effort. There was a good combination of long and short sentences which different tones (yes I did use that COME AT ME) and feelings behind them. There was a lot to like in it. But I feel like you could've spent a little more time stepping back and really adding tone to the surroundings, and expanding just a little more on what we feel and see.

As for recommendation, I probably would recommend this, but not with a raving attitude saying how amazing it is. Although it is exceptionally good, ther is room for improvement, and if you take it into consideration you'll be one hell of a force to be reckoned with.

-Alina

(sorry, I don't really review stuff but I kind of wanted to)