` dynamics ↷ a co-ed group! - check chapter one for application.

Title: 3/5

If the title were a fanfiction story, I would immediately mark it down a few points as it is quite irrelevant and you want to capture the reader’s attention with the title and the few hundred characters from your description that you get when you go to the list of stories. You have put in eye-catching symbols. But, considering all the other role-play based fanfictions with almost the whole title made up of symbols and random characters, it was alright. But regarding all that, the title is unique and when I searched up ‘dynamics’ on AsianFanFics, the story was the first.

Description and Foreword: 13/15

I thought the description was really short and sweet. It didn’t give away too much, and didn’t summarise the whole storyline. The use of inclusive language subtly pulls the reader in and makes them think a bit; ‘will you give them the chance to prove their worth?’

Plot: 19/20

The plot of the story is quite clear so far – the groups are about to debut and are having their own T.V show to help promote. The story isn't just finished yet and I’m quite sure you haven’t gotten to the nitty-gritty end of it.

Characterisation: 3/5

Many characters were introduced in the first chapter and it made it hard for me to remember them all and what they were like. But even so, it clearly showed the member’s personalities through the way they spoke and reacted to things so it kind of helped.

Grammar and Spelling: 17/20

There weren’t any spelling mistakes that I could pick up except for a few typos such as: ‘The said person strided in…’ I’m not really sure what you mean. Was it ‘The sad person’? And also using the same sentence as an example; the past tense of stride is strode, not strided. There are a few minor grammatical mistakes and minor typos similar to this but they don’t pop out a lot.

Flow: 13/15

The flow of the story was quite nicely paced and could be like the summary of the days before a debut. But I have got to admit, the endless speaking and actions made me confused sometimes and I had to read it over again.

There was also a font size change between Chapter One and Chapter Two. The story would look more professional with the same size font the whole way through; except for the ‘Dynamax TV’ titles that showed the readers that it was the episodes.

Overall Enjoyment: 8/10

 I enjoyed it more than I actually thought I would! But I took off marks for my moments of confusion. Readers should be able to read smoothly and enjoyably. But very good job! :)

Total: 76/90