Attempt at Spanish drabble for my dear caline~

Feo

Pienso que Ud. es hermoso.  Siempre pensé que Ud. es hermoso.

¿Porqúe hace a me pensar que soy feo?

Le amo tanto....  No lo sé.

Pero lo peor es el hecho de que me odia.  Cree que soy feo.  Para que, le odio.

Y la lluvia siempre cae.

 

YEAH IT'S REALLY SHORT AND MY GRAMMAR IS PROBABLY HORRENDOUS.  I TRIED OKAY.

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jeniscool100 #1
I don't think it's horrendous at all! :D
I agree with the comments by alexapao01 and NaerEllen below mine. When you said "para que, le odio," did you mean to say that's why I hate you/for that reason I hate you?(:
Perhaps por eso would have been a better connector to use there. But I still got what you were trying to say! :]
alexapao01 #2
"Pienso ud. es hermoso." if you a "que" after "pienso" it'll sound better. you should probably write "me" before "pensar que soy feo", so it'll sound better. "Para que, le odio" what is this suppose to mean? but yeah that's about it, the rest is fine and your grammar is great.
NaerEllen #3
" Tengo siempre pensé que Ud. es hermoso." the 'tengo' there is awkward... because it isn't unnecessary in your phrase.

"Para que, le odio." there I'm not sure what you mean.

that's about it.
NaerEllen #4
It isn't horrible at all. A bit confusing but really pretty xD
caline #5
OMG... this is amazing! ;_; I love it, thank you! WRITE MORE!
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