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*Font in Georgia is the original story. Font in Calibri is my revision.

 

I woke up when I felt someone my cheek and slowly opened my eyes.

I stirred from my state of slumber when the smooth skin of an anonymous person caressed the side of face. My sleep-induced eyes barely expanded to its normal size before the sunshine threatened to burn my pupils, but I willed myself to continue the difficult task.

My eyes opened wide in shock because his face was so close to mine.

But soon enough, the task didn’t seem so cruel because my eyelids expanded the past its accustomed size due to the fact that the now known being’s face was of very close proximity to mine.

I quickly pushed him away and he fell onto the floor. I sat up.

Out of surprise, my hands outstretched themselves and shoved him to the not very soft ground. I then proceeded to sit up from my position of lying on my bed.

He is my betrothed, who always woke me up in the morning.

Although my recent actions did not seem to support it, the man, who was actually my betrothed, woke me up every morning.

His house is located next to mine, and our family has a very good relationship. His father was my mom's childhood friend. We were always together.

His family, who my family has a very valuable relationship with, resides in the house next to ours. So, it is safe to say that we were always together, along with the fact that his father has been friends with my mother since they were children.

We studied at the same schools, even until now in college.

The fact that we even attended the same schools all our life only backed up that statement even more.

When our parents arranged for us to be married, it was the happiest day of my life because I really loved him.

And when my parents had arranged for us to be married, I could proudly say that it was happiest day of my life because I had fallen for the guy.

"Yah! Why did you push me?" He shouted irritably, rubbing his .

“Yah! Why did you push me?” He shouted irritably, rubbing his backside.

"Sorry, Taemin-oppa. I was just surprised." I said in a sleepy voice, the back of my head. He clucked irritably as he stood up and sat next to me.

“Oh. Sorry, Taemin. I got surprised,” I managed to say as I stretched and yawned. He sent a scoff my way, a tell-tale sign that he was, basically, not amused. He then got up from his place on the ground and took a seat next to me on my bed.

"Taemin-oppa. It's Sunday, why did you wake me up in the morning?" I complained, glancing at him. He raised an eyebrow.

“Gosh, Taemin. Why did you wake me up? It’s Sunday. Let me sleep in,” I complained, taking a glance at him. He raised his eyebrow at my comment.

"Silly, you thought it’s still early in the morning?" He asked sarcastically, pointing to the right. I looked to where he was pointing at, which turned out to be the golden wall clock. It was 1pm and that made me laugh sheepishly.

“Ah, you’re so silly. You think it’s still early?” He asked, pointing to my right. My eyes ttraveled to the golden clock on the wall, only to find out that it was actually one in the afternoon already. I laughed sheepishly at my discovery.

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SweetMinSuga
#1
? Why does this person add the dialogue(?) twice?