So basically the chart below is what I'm grading your applications on, and I will score you in the Unaccepted, Accepted, or Considered and have a number grade in each box ranging from 1 to 10. Note that if your application is not featured here, then I have accepted your application or am doing some last-second deciding.

Originality: This is based on the overall uniqueness of the character. Would this character be someone I could meet any time of day, have a conversation with, and find interesting?  Is this character a regular student 24/7 or are they someone with secrets? If I looked into a book and analyzed any of its minor characters, would your character seem to be just like them? Did you put any time into this, or just rush into the application? (You might not think so, but I can tell if you’ve put thought into the application or not.)

Occupation Relevancy: Is your character a student? A vet? A police officer? A e? A chef? Can I connect their occupation to any of the boys or other girls chosen? ß This is the sole reason I released a chapter of Xiaomei quickly, and why I had that picture of the boys’ jobs in the mafia.. I wanted you guys to see if you could come up with an application that may connect to either the members or Xiaomei. Could your character’s occupation be useful in the later plot?

How the Character Met the Bias: This is by far the MOST important of the whole application. This should be something I can read clearly, without confusion and feel as if I would be able to stage it correctly in my writing. I want a character who’s meeting with their bias can be related to my plot, but at the same time be related with their occupation. (i.e., Lay’s occupation deals with gambling. Ara’s occupation is being a waitress in a club that does ion in the back, but gambling in the front. Ara’s occupation relates to Lay’s, and her club that does ion can relate to later plots because Luhan is also into ion. Ara’s application was perfect.)

Overall Relevancy: How well will your character work around the others—members and applicants alike? Are they located in a place where none of the other applicants will find them or a place that can easily be found? Is their lifestyle far too high for the members/applicants to reach?

Content: Was this application really thought out? Was the ‘How You Met xxx’ filled out to expectancy? Did you explain what your character occupation does if it wasn’t obvious? Did you describe a small routine they did?

Plot Relation: How well will your character go along with my plot? (I don’t tell people plot plans, so this is by far my most lenient criteria, but it is one I take into hand. It’s much harder to plan a character when you don’t know the full plot, I know, but I wanted to see who would outshine the others.)

Zero-Sanity

Originality: So, sorry~ You’re up first~ Consequences of being the first applier. xP  Anyway, let’s get this show on the road. Your character was slightly original being a student/chef, but other than that, everything else about her seemed plain. Her personality seemed scattered (not scatter brained). In other words, I feel like you took a bunch of traits from other people you may have read of or known or would like to see in yourself and stuffed them into ChanRi in a disorderly.

Occupation Relevancy: I actually put this into consideration, because your character was a part time chef. She could have easily worked at the little café mentioned in the story as the person that made the pastries.

How the Character Met the Bias: However, this is what threw off your character from being used. Your application contains three sentences, and they’re not very descriptive about the situation. It only tells what your character was doing at the time, which would be fine if it had more detail. Otherwise, it would have helped if you had included maybe a reason as to why Baekhyun had went to her particular workplace. Another thing is that Baekhyun is an armed robber. He would do much more than just playfully steal a piece of cake from your character.

Overall Relevancy: She could be related to the other characters, but maybe only about 3 out of the 12. She definitely would not be able to relate to the members very well though.

Content:  The application had little content. I know I didn’t ask for much, but I feel that you could have elaborated on several things better.

Plot Relation: I simply can’t see how ChanRi could help the plotline go, or be of any use along the story line. I don’t mean for this to be harsh T_T I’m just saying.

pandagirl84

Originality: The character has some originality, but not much. She’s not cliché though. I like that!

Occupation Relevancy: The occupation was probably the least relevant and least original. I can name a handful of people who work at a store their parents own. Since it’s her parent’s store, it’s extremely hard to find another character that would fit that as well unless someone turned in an application that they worked at a store.

How the Character Met the Bias: This did not relate to Sehun at all. He is a cyberstalker. I just highly doubt that he’d allow himself to work at simple store, rather as someone who would work with computers. Also, since he’s the mafia member that handles the computer work, I can’t see him being the type that would be able to make friends easily because of his issue of being around computers 24/7. I would think that the only people he’s really comfortable with would be the members.

Overall Relevancy:  Very few things related to the applicants and members.

Content:  However, don’t take all that criticism. If I were writing a highschool life story, your character could definitely win the cake. Everything is filled out to the last detail, and you even added some things I didn’t ask for. Your grammar and spelling are good and clear. I can tell you took a LOT of time writing it up. Everything is organized and nice looking. (:

Plot Relation: Sorry, but nothing about your character suits my plot line. However, when I write Second Face, I want you to apply for that one, because I’m sure you’d get it. All I can say is, when filling out applications, check to see how well you’re putting things together. Detail isn’t everything!

KoreanGal5

Originality: Your character was VERY original. I was honestly impressed. You were the first application I received that I was really into. You stood as one of my better Luhan apps, and I really really liked that. You have a nice style of writing, and I honestly enjoyed reading your application.

Occupation Relevancy: Unfortunately, this is what got you down the most. As a florist, it’s original but also hard to fit you into the story. Not many mention flowers in their application, and so I really had nowhere to put you. :C

How the Character Met the Bias: This is another thing that got you down. You kind of perceived Luhan as a e, which I can understand. However, He’s simply in the business of ion. In other words, he sells girls into ion. Not that he was one himself.

Overall Relevancy:  Because of the occupation and how you met Luhan, it wasn’t really relevant to the story. Of course, other than these things, I had no problem with your application!

Content:  Oh my gosh. You did so well in this department. You’ve filled out everything to the best of your ability,a nd to the last detail. There was nothing I was confused on, few to no grammar error. I was really impressed! ^^

Plot Relation: Aw. ): I think the things you included in her personality could be used in the plot, but other than that, I don’t think she’d be of use in the future storyline. OTL. I’m going to make another apply fic later! You should apply for it too! ^^

YukiBoo

Originality: The character wasn’t too original, but she wasn’t plain either! You even gave her a location! I was actually planning to use your application for Baek, but sometimes decisions can be a ~ However, you say she’s innocent, but some of the things you mention go against the definition of innocent, so I felt as if you were portraying a person with two sides to their personality. Which is totally fine!

Occupation Relevancy:  Your chosen occupation was 100% relevant. I could have easily had her working at L’Astrance! It wouldn’t have been difficult to incorporate her to the plot, therefore, I have no issues with this aspect of your character.

How the Character Met the Bias:  This is what brought you down. You did a very good job with writing it out, however, I think your perception of Baekhyun was way OOC. He seemed like a crazy psychopath. xD No offense! The guys are mobsters but they do still have remnants of their selves~ I think you lacked to show his gentler side, while instead showing his evil one, which wasn’t such a problem, but still kind of bothered me.

Overall Relevancy: I liked your application honestly. Everything was right to the point without missing a confusing detail or over emphasizing something with detail.

Content:  The contact was everything I needed. Though I feel you should have elaborated on their meeting much more to possibly show a different side of Baekhyun as I mentioned before. Other than that, nothing too wrong with it.

Plot Relation: Your character was nicely written and could have easily slipped into my plot ideas. Though I wouldn’t have anyway of placing her higher up in the plot priority list, I would have any difficulty whatsoever with her profile. Good Job!

caecie

Originality: The character wasn’t original to me besides the fact that she’s Japanese. Everything you’ve written seems to be the cliché  way a fan would perceive Kai’s perfect woman. What I mean is when I go through AFF looking for Kai fanfiction to read when I have Kai feels, 90% of those written feature a female lead who is incredibly talented at dancing, taking dance lessons, likes to dance, etc with dance. This is a pet peeve of mine, and I feel that people should branch away from associating Kai with dancing. Sure, it may be something he really loves to do and wouldn’t mind doing all his life, but it doesn’t sum up his character—in story or not. I’m sure there’s much more to Kai than dancing.  

Occupation Relevancy: This part has to do with the way you see kai. I think you’re still seeing him as Dancing Machine Kai rather than Heartbreaking Plotting Heartless Kai. Your character is a dancer which makes me wonder how she would relate to Kai’s Heartbreak Scams in any way.

How the Character Met the Bias: This was conflicting. In the personality section, you say your character is quiet and innocent and doesn’t trust others easily. Therefore, this makes me wonder why would she run across the street to talk to someone she’s never met. Her believing all his lies ties in with her innocence, but why would she do that in the first place if she’s not a trusting person?

Overall Relevancy: Honestly, I wouldn’t be able to relate your character to any of the other characters or members.

Content:  The content wasn’t much, nor was it very detailed. Ideas ran into each other and remained cliché.

Plot Relation: She’s rather un-relating to my plot. She can’t associate her dancing unless she was a dancer at a club… and a student seemed an option that should be followed with another interesting occupation. If not, then the ‘How You Met Kai’ section needed to be filled out more in depth. ^^ Just keep practicing and think about these things when you apply and you’ll get better in no time!

Twiillaa

Originality: The character was fairly original. Definitely the only one to be submitted as a Lingerie Model!

Occupation Relevancy: Her occupation wouldn’t relate easily at first, and if I did accept her, I still don’t know where I’d put her. Well. Okay, I have an idea, but I’m not sure it’d fully work, so I’m actually kind of iffy. You were actually on my better side of Baekhyun applicants, and definitely considered to be chosen.

How the Character Met the Bias: This was the killer part. It was really well written, with good grammar and sequence of events, but what I want to know is how this ties into Baekhyun being an armed robber does? I really don’t even know what he was doing at the photo shoot except having a conversation. I don’t understand what he was doing there and if he hand an agenda. It seemed as if you just put him at the photo shoot because you wanted him there. He’s an armed robber, but it seemed he had no intention of stealing anything except glances at AiXiang.

Overall Relevancy: I’m not sure your character would fit in with any of my other applicants or the members. Maybe Luhan because he’s into ion, but she also doesn’t seem like the time that would get along with others. In the right situation, her personality could boost the story, but some things were off.

Content:  Basically everything was filled out nicely, neatly, and fully. However, I have an issue with the personality section. You say she’s quiet and doesn’t express herself well but is a sweetalker? Sweet talking is a skill learned over practice, and if she’s a quiet person, I can’t see how she would be very good at it like you see. You also say she’s dull, but her personality is portrayed as a person with hundreds of colors.

Plot Relation: I have an idea of where I would put your character into the story, but that also depends on some other unknown factors. I plan for this story 24/7 (ideas just swirl in my head) and I have three sheets of paper where I write down random ideas that I plan to eventually put together later. Things on that paper change constantly and so having a character that depended on that paper (which your character does because of the application), it will always be an unsure road as to whether I’ll use her or not.

Boyfriendsujusnsd9

Originality: I don’t really know whether to say your character is original or not. The student/trainee occupation is very cliché, but the stable job was rather unique. Also, some other things like her father being a CEO interested me in the application. 

Occupation Relevancy: Her occupations are…on the irrelevant side. Even though she has three, they don’t relate to Sehun at all. He’s a cyber-stalker and being a trainee or stable worker or student wouldn’t really catch his attention unless your character was either extremely smart, great horse rider, or a very well-known trainee in the entertainment world. I wouldn’t know how to relate her to the other characters because her age limits her school locations, which may be the only thing she had going for her in the occupation section.

How the Character Met the Bias: Both parts were confusing and not very likely. I’m not using any idols as idols in my story, and I don’t think I’ll use any idols besides the EXO members either so Jessica and Krystal being related as a little odd. Also, in the first how she met Sehun, Sehun is a cyber-stalker, not a real-life stalker unless he has business to do with the person, so it didn’t relate. Also, in the second one, it was still confusion and using someone else’s random computer doesn’t seem like something people would do. (you can actually be sued for that.) Another thing is that Sehun and Luhan are not in the same time, so Sehun using Luhan’s laptop would make no sense. (Try to pretend HunHan doesn’t exist. I tend not to use OTPs in my stories.) There is also no profit, therefor there is no reason sehun would help her with it. As I mentioned before, Sehun seems like he would be kind of awkward with people he wasn’t chatting with over a computer. You displayed that partly at time, and then sometimes you just didn’t.

Overall Relevancy: I don’t think your character would get along with the others. Once again, the only way I could relate her would be with her being a student, but her age is off, so that also has issued problems.

Content: Overall, you did write a lot, but it seemed like a lot to read and was disorganized. I got really confused with some things, and though you said a lot, there wasn’t a lot of explanation of your character. However, your personality section seemed to not contradict itself much, so I had no issues with that.

Plot Relation: If I did accept your character, I’m not sure where I’d place her or if she’d work well along with the plot I had in mind. 

Sacrifice

Originality: I’d like to really say original she is. However, from her personality I think that she’d be a very interesting person~

Occupation Relevancy: I don’t know if you didn’t notice, I sure didn’t, but You never filled out the occupation part! xD

How the Character Met the Bias:  I don’t understand why Chanyeol was standing in the rain outside the empty house next to hers for no apparent reason. It didn’t seemed to be an image him—he seems like a very depressed person in this section.

Overall Relevancy:  I don’t think I could relate your character to the others at all.

Content:  There was little content included, and though it wasn’t confused, It seemed so scattered.

Plot Relation: I think she’d be a good bystander, but other than that, there’s not really much to say about her if I chose her and put her into the story.

Parkyeon-ah

Originality: This character has to be one of the most original that I’ve received. She seems to be very interesting, and very related to the mafia part of life, but can still blend in with normal people. You didn’t create her to the point where she was supposed to be the perfect little girl who was pretty, innocent, quiet, well-mannered etc. She seemed to stand out VERY well.

Occupation Relevancy:  Her occupation was completely relevant. She easily fits into the mafia scene being a boxing assistant and doing illegal bets, so I wouldn’t have any problems relating her to Kris, with the extra of Lay being useful for her chapters either! At the samed time being a waitress, I could easily have made her work at L’Astrance~ I’m happy with this part!

How the Character Met the Bias: Since this is Kris, the boss of EXO-M, I feel you should have elaborated on the meeting more than just a few sentences. Also, their meeting seems so simply rather than something big and great. I don’t have a problem with it, but I’m not super happy with it either.

Overall Relevancy: I think your character could easily get along with many of the other applicants I’ve received and would fit into the groups just fine. Also, I think she could have definitely bonded with Lay, so I have no complaints about this either.

Content:  Though the personality section was really long, the How She Met Kris was rather short which disappointed me. I think you could have put more into that section, and it may have been chosen!

Plot Relation: She’s very related to my thoughts in mind, so don’t be surprised if you see her pop up as a side character in the story! This was one of my better applications, so I’m really not complaining much about anything~

Minah07

Originality: She was a very interesting character to read about honestly. However some things simply didn’t add up in her application. It was very fun to read and overall Jazrui seemed like someone I’d like to meet.

Occupation Relevancy: This was my biggest problem. Her being a Criminal Defense Lawyer is highly unlikely. For her age anyway. She’s only 19, meaning that in Korea, she’s still be finishing up her high school senior year. Even in the US she may JUST entering college. It’s not something that would happen rather easily.

How the Character Met the Bias: This part of the application for those who apply for Sehun trips people up a lot. Being someone who is into crime himself, I don’t see any reason as to why he would help Jazrui in her time of need. He’s hacked millions and sent more to their deaths by doing so, I don’t think he’d have the caring in his heart to help a random girl off the side of the street. Another thing, I can’t picture Sehun, the boy who sits behind computers all day with good social skills. I feel he’d be rather quiet, and have to be approached before approaching someone else. Let alone allow someone into his home.

Overall Relevancy:  I can’t relate your character to many of the other applicants. Maybe two or three could relate, but other than that, it wouldn’t work. Also, she being a Cirminal Defense Lawyer would be interesting to see her go against the boys, but I just don’t see it happening.

Content:  Here is where most people go through and contradict themselves, and you did so, but don’t worry, it’s a common mistake. You say that she’s never had friends or have small talk with people, yet she has a boyfriend and is good at reading people? I can’t see this. Unless you’ve had experience with people, it’s very hard to understand their train of thought. Being a quiet, reserved person with a good amount of friends in their lifetime is different than being a quiet, slight wallflower that suddenly has the ability to know how people are. The boyfriend thing becomes an issue when you say she spends her life in school and work. How did they meet? Why did he approach her when no one else would? I’m not saying human understanding isn’t impossible, it is. But, it doesn’t just happen.

Plot Relation: I can see where I’d put her in the story, but I think that she’d be way too far up for the other characters to touch without doing it illegally. With the way she met Sehun, I just don’t think it’d work.

awkwardninturtle

Originality: I’m not really sure I see much originality in the character. Of course, no one has turned in a Jewelry Store Clerk occupation, but her personality seems like that of an average girl.

Occupation Relevancy: Being a Jewelry store clerk, I can definitely see how Baekhyun would be related to that. Of course, it is cliché, but it’s better than something that doesn’t relate at all.

How the Character Met the Bias: The thing about this is that Baekhyun is an armed robber. He’s experienced, and I can’t see him allowing himself to be caught by camera or anything else. I don’t see him going into the jewelry store for no reason and risk himself being seen and if caught able to be identified. That seems like an amateur move by him.

Overall Relevancy: I can’t relate her to anyone except Baekhyun. I mean, if I added a few tweaks, I could make it work, but the application in itself doesn’t seem to coincide with members or characters. However, I could make her the owner of the Jewelry store where Kai bought Lucy’s necklace. O:!

Content:  The content isn’t a lot that’s throroughly explained or over detailed, but nor is it completely empty. However, the character lacks a push of power behind her.

Plot Relation: Relatable, somewhat, to the plot, but not enough to be used. However you did summarize Baekhyun’s personality well in the How She Met Baekhyun section. I still can’t see her helping my plot much though.

Suhyun

-xmunstrr

Originality: The originality of this character is genius. She’s a highschool student, but not he boring –study-my-life-away student. LOL. Omg she has a fake id for parties. She’s a crazy student. I like that. You gave her a colorful personality!

Occupation Relevancy: Being a highschool student though puts here nearly 4+ years younger than Kris. Number is just an age, I know, but I can’t see this girl of 18 years, getting together with 23 year old mature kris who gets people killed and and sold for a living. She’s crazy, but not that crazy.

How the Character Met the Bias: This was iffy. I understand she’s a dance student, but what was Kris doing just standing there? I feel you could have elaborated that. Is there a reason it was that particular spot? Also, what about the girl caught his eye. Also at their first meeting, Kris is a Mafia leader. I think he knows his way around well enough not to give out his name to random strangers, no matter how well he starts off with them.

Overall Relevancy: I can’t see her relating to any of the other chosen applicants, except maybe Sehun’s, but even for his I’d have to check the age and occupation of the applicant.

Content:  The content was very good. There was a lot. However, I think you should tone down the personality section. I like a thorough character, but I don’t require a super long personality, and it is one of the least focused parts of the character for me. I can usually get a good feel of a character’s lifestyle with just a paragraph or two of personality. It was kind of crazy to see all those paragraphs. @_@ But other than that, there was no problem with content whatsoever.

Plot Relation She’s cool, but she also seems limited in her actual usefulness. I can’t see her being a major plot device or main character. Not really sure if she’d fit in as a side character either. Sorry. 

ShiKy25

Originality: The originality of this character was nice. She’s Japanese and a journalist with interesting features!

Occupation Relevancy: I can see her occupation fitting in just fine. She could easily be writing an article about the mafia world, or about Yumi’s neighbor that died, or taking photos at a school, or all of the above! Nice!

How the Character Met the Bias: This was extremely, extremely, extremely, confusing. I had to force myself to read it several times, and I still don’t quite have a complete understanding as to what is happening in this part. Their meeting was too brief, and the feelings between the two were developing too fast. I would comment more on this, but I couldn’t follow the train of thought used here.

Overall Relevancy: I can see it working somewhat if some things were changed, however, I’m just so confused by a lot of this applications.

Content:  The content is confusing as stated before, so I can’t really tell you how I feel about it. There are many errors which I find hard to read and/or understand.

Plot Relation: I may edit some things and use her as a minor character, but right now, I’m not sure.

YukiBoo

Originality: The only thing I find different about this character is her occupation and her reaction to boys.

Occupation Relevancy: The occupation as a designer doesn’t’ really relate to any one—members or applicants. Unless she like..designed Kris’ suits or something which isn’t mentioned. I can’t see how it related to Baekhyun either.

How the Character Met the Bias: This was confusing, and to read it and understand it was a slight struggle. I have questions though. Baekhyun is an armed robber so why is he working at a fashion designing place? I’m sure he has no skill on how to design and create clothes, so I don’t understand what he’s doing there. Is there a reason as to why within the first few days of knowing him, she’s been able to let him into her heart, break down barriers, and share her soul with?

Overall Relevancy: I can’t see this character relating to the members, the applicants, or the story.

Content:  The content was rather poor, and thought you typed a sufficient amount, nothing was really thorough or explanatory which made it hard for me to even critic.

Plot Relation: I don’t mean to be rude, but this application is pretty irrelevant to anything relating to Criminal Minds.

Table_cookiE

Originality: So the character is actually very original, despite her cliché opposites attract job occupation. I like her personality. She’s like an aimless bullet. No one knows what she’s going to do next! :P

Occupation Relevancy: Her occupation can me input into my story rather easily, and I don’t have much of a problem for this except the profiler thing is pretty cliché. However, thumbs up on the mentalist section. That’s rather unique~

How the Character Met the Bias: There is only one problem I have with this. Kris being a mafia leader, I doubt he would lose to Hayeon, no matter how good she is. Nor would he leave her with his name. That’s highly amateur-ish and unprofessional.

Overall Relevancy: I can see this character being a nuisance for the others, but I can’t see her getting along with them anytime in the future. Her principles are different, as is her personality. This isn’t necessarily a bad thing; it’s just that in this situation, it’s not much a good thing either.

Content:  Honestly, the content was perfect. I don’t think there’s anything for me to say here.

Plot Relation: I could definitely see her in my plot as a minor and not major. She is DEFINITELY going to be used a minor character later on. Don’t even doubt it. I really liked this application.

Okay so that shouldbe all of it. It's nearing 1:15 am. and I am EXHAUSTED. I have to force myself to do this right now, but as far as i know, I'm finished. Watch. I'm probabily not. Just hallucinating. Don't take ANYTHING said in this post as an insult. It is constructive criticism strictly. If I come of that way, I'm sorry but I am nto bashing characters or creators. It's just some of use are more experienced wit these things than others. All I have to say is that hopefully when you fill out another application, you guys think of the things I mentioned here, and make your application so wonderful! <3