Review

Story: Lover to Lover --> http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/178859/lover-to-lover-chunji-ljoe-teentop-love

Author: NgirlTT

Note: This review is based on the foreword and chapters 1 to 9 of the story

4/5 points for presentation:

Story is well-separated into paragraphs.

Grammar is correct, but they are occasional spelling mistakes.

More time lapses needed.

Chapter titles are appropriate and relevant.

Punctuations are correctly used.

Sentence structures can be further improved.

3.5/5 for dialogue:

Dialogues are well used.

Try to avoid using the word ‘said’ too much. It will affect the smooth flow of the story. Example: ‘Did you see that?’ Chunji said. ‘Yes, I saw that!’ Niel said. Using ‘said’ too much will affect the flow of the story to a certain extent.

Dialogues are appropriate for each character’s characteristics.

Dialogues are also easy to read and understand.

Dialogues are paced quite evenly.

7/10 points for plot/pacing:

Story is quite realistic and is retains the audience’s interest.

The story’s pace is a bit too fast and the flow of the story is good.

Chapters leave a reasonable amount of cliffhangers and suspense.

Reactions are appropriate, but can be improved as some reactions are a bit unrealistic.

Storyline has a consistent timeline, but sometimes, the time tends to go past too fast.

Points are good but some points stated might cause confusion to the reader.

6/10 points for characterisation:

Characters are credible.

Characters need to have more depth and their own “voice” in the story.

Character actions and motivations are believable, but needs to be more realistic.

Characters traits and quirks are likable.

7/10 for writing style/technique:

Writing is clear, but it needs to be more concise and vivid to allow it to stand on its own.

Voice is true to story/characters.

Style remains consistent throughout the story.

Changes in POV are clear and easy for the reader to understand, but POVs change too fast. POVs should be more on the main character.

Opening catches the attention of readers, but it needs to be more dynamic.

4/5 for authenticity/originality:

Story is original and the plot is good.

Details are consistent and authentic, but they need to be more concise and make the story feel real to the reader. Story details are consistent with minimal errors

4/5 for overall reader experience:

Story is readable and enjoyable but the more details are needed to allow the reader to have a clearer idea of what’s happening in the story.

Satisfaction is felt after each chapter.

Other comments:

Good effort in the story although much improvement is needed on the story details.

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