Review

Story: Romance of a Teenage Girl --> http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/331261/romance-of-a-teenage-girl-blockbinfiniteyou

Author: ukissme567

Note: This review is based on the foreword and chapters 1 to 6 of the story

3/5 points for presentation:

Story is well-separated into paragraphs.

Grammar needs to be improved. Take note of words that need to be written in past tense.

More time lapses needed.

Chapter titles are appropriate and relevant.

Punctuations are correctly used.

3/5 for dialogue:

Dialogues need to be written in full sentences. Example: ‘Wow, the fireworks are amazing!’ U-Kwon exclaimed, clapping his hands.

Dialogues are appropriate for each character’s characteristics.

Dialogues are also easy to read and understand.

Dialogues are paced evenly.

5/10 points for plot/pacing:

Story needs to be a bit more realistic and must retain the audience’s interest.

The story’s pace is too fast, but the flow of the story is good.

Chapters leave a reasonable amount of cliffhangers and suspense.

Reactions are appropriate, but can be improved as some reactions are too dramatic.

Storyline needs to have a consistent timeline.

Points are good as no confusing points are present.

5/10 points for characterisation:

Characters are credible.

Characters need to have more depth and their own “voice” in the story.

Character actions and motivations are believable, but needs to be more realistic.

Characters traits and quirks are likable.

7/10 for writing style/technique:

Writing is clear, but it needs to be more concise and vivid to allow it to stand on its own.

Voice is true to story/characters.

Style remains consistent throughout the story.

Changes in POV are clear and easy for the reader to understand.

Opening needs to be more dynamic and catches the attention of readers.

4/5 for authenticity/originality:

Story is original, but plot can be further improved to be more exciting.

Details are consistent and authentic, but they need to be more concise and make the story feel real to the reader. Story details are consistent with minimal errors

Story title is appropriate and catches the reader's interest to a certain extent.

3/5 for overall reader experience:

Story is readable and fairly enjoyable but more work is needed to leave a reader wanting more.

Moderate satisfaction is felt after each chapter.

Other comments:

Good effort in the story although there are much improvements to be made.

Credits

Grading and Review Rubrics are adapted from:

Easily Mused. A meeting place for writers, readers and book lovers. ---> http://easilymused.com/book-reviews/book-review-grading-rubric/