Title: 7/10

I would've given it 8 or 9/10 if not for the non-capitalization of "girl's." Otherwise, it's a great title, a bit common, maybe, but awesome. It gives you a sense of the words "dream come true,"  which can be found in the foreword. It's also related to the story, of course, so yeah.

Plot: 16/20

Well, it's okay. It's not that original, though, because I saw some stories before with a similar storyline. Yet some ideas are original in your story, so I give you majority points. I can't give you more than that, because Denise didn't go anywhere yet.

I like how you put in "listen to's" at the front, like a part-songfic part-regular fic thing.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation: 15/20

The spelling is great. The grammar and the punctuation is somewhat off. For example, you put " "s while introducing the little sister. It would be better if you just left it alone as Denise. (If you want more of the corrections, just tell me, and I'll be happy to tell you! :) It's just I like to write my reviews short for the writer and the readers to be able to read quickly.)

Flow: 14/20

You kind of rush along. For example, in chapter 1, without saying anything about EATING the food, you already say, "Oh gosh! The food was great!"

That's just an example, of course. The general flow is kind of fast. Not that it's badly fast, like quadruple fast forward. Just, you know, 1.5 to double fast forward, if you know what I mean.

Foreword/Description: 5/5

I give it full points because, well, it's great. I kind of was annoyed by the shop intro, since it wasn't that related to the story, but hey, it's not that bad.

Appearance: 5/5

Great! Awesome! Good poster, nice, relaxing background. Not too flashy.

Characters: 14/15

I can imagine Denise and Danny pretty well, even Diane. The father, mother, though, was kind of a mystery. Also: you only explain about their relation to K-Pop and music, not they're usual, other non-music related interests. But since it's just the first 5 chapters, hey, it's alright--you still have lots of time.

Bonus: 4/5

I am personally a great fan of Infinite, too. So yay for Infinite! :D But I don't really like swearing, but it seems like it's a part of character. I took a half-point off for that. The other half was from the 0% Sunggyu thing. Sorry, my bias is Sunggyu in Infinite. :)

Total: 80/100

A B! Not bad for a 5-chapter-so-far story. :) Great job! I really like it.