Rubric:

Title: 5/5

A Hazy Shade of Winter. I like the sound of the title. It kind of tells what the story is all about; but at the same time, it fogs what is inside the story—like, two faces of a mirror. All in all, your title suits the mood of the story and is not very cliché, not all fanfics have such titles. Good job!

Poster: 3/5

As for the poster, it is nice. It has this melodrama and fluffy feel to it. But, to be honest, it does not capture the mood of the story; I mean, you could’ve gone for a sadder/bluer theme.

Description: 10/10

Using that Frank Herbert quote was an expert move on your part. It fully concludes the end of your story—I really liked loved it. You did not really use a ‘description’, right? Instead, you inserted an excerpt from the story itself. I must say it was a nice ‘description’ because I instantly got into the fic’s mood, and it got me like, “Oh my, who was that slumped figure? Did she shot the guy? Oh my gosh, let me read more of this.” So, that.

Foreword: 8/10

I couldn’t say much about your foreword; it only contained your other fic. But on a side note, I wished you did not say that this story was poorly written. I honestly think it isn’t.

Chapter Titles: 5/5

Now this part is so good. I really loved how you skilfully made use of song titles as chapter titles. Might as well learn from you, tee-hee. I really loved it, it fits every chapter. Period.

Plot: 20/20

The plot is unique in its own way. It was a tragic one; although I was expecting some Rated M stuff, but fortunately you hadn’t magnified on that scope. (Good girl, you.) The use of two different POVs are executed very well; it doesn’t get the readers go, “Umm, so who is this one talking right now…?”. You also used different font colours for the POVs, nice.

Characters: 13/15

Sarah was well-described. We all knew she was this strong lady who got her ity lost at such a young age; but she doesn’t let it destroy her fight for a better life. But as for Eunhyuk’s characterization…I must say he wasn’t solidified well for a story character. Maybe you wanted that Eunhyuk be the mysterious, emotional guy but—he does not really have a good portrayal.

Spelling/Grammar: 14/15

This story was near-perfect. You have a wide range of vocabulary for someone whose first language isn’t English. I knew you strived hard, I can see it in your story. There are very few spelling and grammar mistakes though:

In the fic:

The impact of the heavy door as it close was like a flip of switch --I spilled seventeen years worth of tears.

             It should be:

The impact of the heavy door as it close was like a flip of switch --I spilled seventeen years’ worth of tears. (It’s just the punctuation don’t worry.)

And another was this...

In the fic:

Then an idea formed in my head, something that my subconscious have always known that I wanted.

It should be:

Then an idea formed in my head, something that my subconscious has always known that I wanted. (You should’ve used ‘HAS’ because you were referring to a singular person.)

Flow: 4/5

For a fiveshot fic, it wasn’t rushed. But in the middle part, where Sarah tries to escape, I got lost there for a moment. Then as I read on further, I got back on the right tracks.

Overall Enjoyment: 10/10

I enjoyed this story and I’m fancying for more. Although I know there won’t be more because…[Spoiler!Alert] the girl died, and Eunhyuk is almost good as dead.

Bonus(Random Chatting):

So, I really enjoyed myself in this fanfic. It was one of a kind. Tragic and bit romantic at the same time. It pierced my heart because of the merciless fate the two had encountered…very sad. And that means you got me affected and that was a nice thing from a writer, isn’t it? To make your readers affected, so you go girl. Go on and write more.

Total: 92/100  

Letter Grade:  A(90-100)   B(89-80)    C( 79-70)   D(69-50)    E(49-0)