► Title: 5 /5

 

Comment:  You added the Korean which made it sound interesting.

 

► Characters:  4/5

 

Comment:  Keeping the characters as themselves is good.

 

► Description and foreward:  24/25

 

Comment:  The foreward is usually a way to start a story, but how you did it works too.

 

► Poster/Banner/BG/whatever:  9/10

 

Comment: It could be made a bit bigger. 

 

► Originality:  3/5

 

Comment:  Changing the names is a bit strange, no offense. ^^;; But it's good the rest of the way.

 

► Grammar:  10/10

 

Comment:  The grammar is fine. 

 

► Writing style:  8/10

 

Comment: It could use a little bit of work, but the rest is fine.

 

► Flow:  9/10

 

Comment: It was good.

 

► Overall enjoyment:  18/20

 

► Bonus:  3/5

 

Comment for Bonus: I'm not really into these kind of stories, but I have nothing against it.  

 

► Overall grade:  93/105