Don't give up!! ><

Your English is just fine. I don't find it formal and in some cases people like formal. It'll all just depend on the reader and what they like to read. It's not senseless at all. I like how you write, because I can feel the personality behind it. Makes me understand the character better. ^^

Truthfully, everyone has the possibility of "being a rightful author". There is no book of rules and guidelines that says you're a rightful or not rightful author. If you're writing because you want to and you enjoy writing then nothing else should really matter. I can't stress this enough, write because you want to write. Not for the attention but because you want to share your story and express yourself. It's always a major plus when you get subscribers and comments. It's great, but if you worry about what people will think all the time you'll always be insecure about it. Your work is great! Believe in yourself!

From a writer to a writer, I was, and occasionally still am, in your position right now. In the beginning it was hard and I felt like giving up. Do you know what I did then? I told myself that my writing was perfect just the way it was and that imperfections are perfections. When telling myself didn't work, I just took time away to clear my head of all the insecurities. My writing has improved a lot since my first fanfic and is still improving to this day. It will always be improving.
I was lucky to get a hit with one of my fanfics, but all the attention, truthfully don't help as much as one think it does. It feels great getting comments and subscribers, but it makes me a lot more self-conscious in what I write and what I present to my readers. But in the end I stick to my motto, "Write for no one else, but yourself. Write for your own pleasure and enjoyment." If I'm happy with it then my readers should be happy with it. :)

OTL really really really sorry for the rambling and "story" I wrote there.
But seriously, DON'T GIVE UP!
Hwaiting! :)

Dont give up! Why wud u think that way?! Okay, i admit it, i used to think that way with my fic too. Considering its the first time i ever wrote something voluntarily (besides english class ofc XD) But as time grew by, i got more subscribers n my unnies on aff gave me a lot of support n im grateful for that. So dont just give up okay? No ones work here is flawless so dont worry too much. :)

Don't stop writing! D: Your english is perfectly intelligible. You aren't being too formal either - not that being formal is a negative, it really just depends on the person and their own preferences as they come out to other people - formal ==> more serious and professional wheras writing informally would take away from the seriousness of the story as well as the author. Being informal though could in some cases allow the author to personalize the work - and I'm drabbling now, but my point still stands that you aren't being too formal at all in your writing and it very much fits the piece =)

And okay, about your uncertainty about "being a rightful author" no one has the right to tell you whether you are or aren't. When it comes to writing, you should be primarily writing for yourself. If other people can benefit/enjoy/learn from it, then great; that's a bonus. But the second you start worrying about what other people think, you will stop enjoying it, as you mentioned earlier - you will become disatisfied with your work, and if in some cases that you end up trying to please too many people, the quality of your writing will be sacrificed. I'm blathering on again, but the point is, although it sounds cliche, but it is so true (and as an author I can relate) IT DOESN't MATTER WHAT OTHER PEOPLE THINK because there will always be that one person (or more) who really enjoys it.

Also if it makes you feel better, you are on the better half of the fanfiction writers on this site, so keep it up!
Hwaiting!

P.S forgive any spelling mistakes - I'm on an ipod.

thanks guys for such lovely comments.... i really do appreciate them.... thanks for making me smile before i go to bed.... :) aw~ my head hurts.... but i still have to continue what i have started... (drama much?) hihi.... saranghae chingus!

Never Give up! I kust ended my first ever fic and I think that I should improve too that is why I continue. If you wan to read mine. Just do so! Tell me what you think and surpport me too! We are all a bit insecure its okay though. Just continue, you know you are never really happy with your own work, but others are! I am <3 continue

OMG NO YOU DO NOT :O YOUR ENGLISH IS REALLY GOOD AND YOU ARE NOT TOO FORMAL YOUR FIC IS AMAZING~ I LOVE YOUR FIC BECAUSE IT DOESN'T HAVING TOO MUCH EXPLANATIONS AND IT IS WRITTEN REALLY WELL. I HOPE YOU CONTINUE TO WRITE YOUR FIC :) I ENJOY IT A LOT. TO BE HONEST IT IS ONE OF THE ONLY FIC I READ RIGHT NOW BECAUSE I DONT LIKE ANY OTHER ONES!