Title: Wandering Insanity [4/5]

As titles could easily be the hardest part of any piece of literature, I gave you 4 points since it's simple and to the point, as well as it clearly reflects the whole story. I only took off one point, thinking you could do with something a little better. Possibly it's me being a nitpick, but this is a really good title and a really great fanfic that goes along well with it. The chapter titles are also amazing; kudos to you.

 

Graphics/Poster: [5/5]

The graphics and posters are brilliant and beautifully made. Just wow, the colors and effects on it were eye-catching and I thought it was lovely, this also applies for all the chapter visuals as well. They fit well and didn't distract me from enjoying the story.

Foreward/Description: [9/10]

The description was clear and straightforward, and you didn't use any unnecessary colors. However, I only docked off one point as I felt you could've added a bit more to the description and possibly even quotes/lines from the story to draw the readers in more. The foreward, there was no issue with it, so nothing to comment about there. By the way, thank you so very much for not using blinding colors in your foreword.

Originality: [9/10]

Though the whole "mental asylum" scenario isn't very original by itself, the whole thing was realistically and very well executed. It was great, because most stories out there are pretty much made up, you seemed to do some research and it just made the whole problem much more realistic and relatable.

Plot: [20/20]

Your plot was amazing. Just everything from the point-of-views to the description of what Sandara was going through as she became insane. It was just so realistic and breathtaking. I love your plot and I love how everything is described. I could practically feel the fear and anxiety radiating out of Seunghyun and Sandara. Just, wow, the emotions were great and well executed, the plot was not necessarily relatable but it was great. I wasn't bored as I read all the chapters. Even if I don't ship the two together, the way you set them up makes me want the couple, so good job with that.

Sandara's reason for insanity didn't seem far-fetched, nor did her reaction to the supposed treatment. Seunghyun's character was good well characterized and understandable as well as the fact that he actually seemed to care for the patients as humans than dolls made him likable. The sasaeng fan that haunts Dara is perfect and made her entrances in the best ways, intensifying the problem and Dara's 'insanity.'

However, the only thing I would say is that your chapters seem to have gotten shorter since the first couple of ones. I understand this is an issue as you struggle for inspiration and continuing on with this story (with all the stress and school possibly, I don't really know), just good luck.

Grammar/Spelling: [29/30]

Your writing is impeccable. There were no spelling errors, the grammar was correct and you used everything possible. One point was taken off due to some confusion with commas (or the lack of) and a couple of sentences being oddly worded, but those mistakes can be easily fixed and they didn't affect the enjoyment of the story itself.

All I have to say is that you could use a few more commas to make your sentences longer. It may just be your writing style, so I didn't dock any points for this.

Flow: [9/10]

The flow was great, it wasn't too slow to bore me nor was it so fast that I didn't get what was going on. It was pretty much perfect, and that little blurb/one chapter in Seunghyun's POV was perfectly placed. It's fine to switch around POV's, but you kept the central focus on Sandara, which I love.

Again, the only reason why I docked a point is the fact that "Hyo Jung" suddenly turned into "Hyorin". I know it's Hyorin's real name, but I wish you'd have given the readers possibly a little mention why the names such switched because I thought it was a new character that just all of the sudden took Hyo Jung's place. That left me a bit confused until I googled Hyorin's real name. I also felt like the sudden spark between Seunghyun and Sandara in the latest chapter just went by really fast, perhaps you could've waited a little longer to add the 'romance' part of the story?

Neatness: [5/5]

Nothing to say about this, it was neat and easy to read. No outrageously bright colors or illegible fonts.

Extra: [5/5]

Your story is very enjoyable and you just gained another subscriber haha. I really do love your writing and your story was practically impeccable as nothing was really wrong with it. Great job, but, ahhh... I said I was a harsh reviewer, but your story made me seem like I grade really easily haha. Thanks for letting me review and read this, I really did enjoy all eight chapters of it.

Total: [95/100]