Title : 5 / 5

The title is short, and not very cliché, how a title should be. C:

Description : 8 / 10

The description’s a bit too short for me, but then again it’s straight to the point, and foreshadows what the fanfic is about. It pulls the reader into wanting to read the fanfic, which is the main goal of the description. I think you did a really good job putting in the quotes from the song. (:

Poster : 3 / 5

Since the poster reflects the feeling of the fanfic in general, I thought that the poster should have been more gloomy. You know, kinda misty and blurry? The poster gives off more of a romantic feel, when the fanfic is about Kevin ending his romance with his girlfriend.

Plot : 8 / 10

The plot is pretty simple to understand, since it’s based on Chris Brown’s Goodbye. I’ve listened to that songs dozens of times before, so I kinda assumed what the fanfic would be about. I thought the plot was really sad. ): It was enjoyable, but sad~ It gives the readers a view of a breakup from the guy’s point of view instead of the girl, and I think that’s kind of a hard thing to do.

Grammar / Spelling : 9.5 / 10

Grammar and spelling is really good, except for a few mistakes.

“That was the final draw and she was shook from her thoughts, her eyes were lined by tears now.”

I guess what you’re trying to say is that she snapped out of her thoughts? I would have written the sentence like this:

“That was the final draw, and she was shaken from her thoughts; her eyes were lined by tears now.”

Other than that, there were a couple of misspellings, for example when you used ‘chocked’ when the correct spelling is ‘choked’. Though, I knew what you meant.

 

Ending : 10 / 10

Sad ending is sad. )”: It could be better, but going straight to the point is a good way to go.

Writing : 38 / 40

Your writing is really good. ^ ^ b You make sure to make the reader realize how the characters are feeling, and the descriptions are so well written. I’m jealous. LOL. Don’t stop writing!

Chapter Titles : 5 / 5

Gonna give you an extra five points since your fanfic is a oneshot. C:

Format : 5 / 5

The way the story was written makes it easy to read and comprehend. Very good decision on the format. ^ ^

 

Total : 91.5 / 100

I really liked your oneshot! ^ ^ I don’t think I can even write like that. Keep at it~ c:

NOOOOO HE BROKE UP WITH HERRRRR. DDDDX