Hello,

As requested, I've finished beta reading for The Heartbreaker for sbroces and have provided her with feed back. I think that overall the story is a good read and that she has a sound understanding of her characters, and what she wants them to do. I think that the only problem lies in the tenses of the story, which I tried my best to fix without breaking the flow of the story. I did some minion spelling corrections, as well as, sentence arrangements in the piece, but not very many. I think that this story is a good one, and just needed some help when it came to the grammar. 

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