Drabble Contest 3 Comments

1. Deeply emotional and very bitter, you paint the pain of a broken heart and one-sided love beautifully.  It shows that even when things are over, they’re not necessarily over.  So sad but also very well written.
2. My only confusion comes from Youngbae’s name being spoken at the very end, which makes me question just who was talking even though it’s Taeyang centric.  Beyond that, it’s another emotional and bitter story, much like the first one, but conveyed just as effectively through dialogue and more broken up sentences.  Excellent job and well written.
3. I so want to know more about this world!  It’s really only the barest of glimpses into something that sounds like it has so much promise and I’m torn.  haha  It’s a fascinating peek to be sure, and I was glad that the little winged, girl caught the OC, but I’m definitely more than curious now. 
4. Another bitter, angsty one, though this time the love seemed mutual, but unable to be maintained together.  The descriptions are great though and I certainly feel the pain between them.  It was nice at the very end that the other was able to let go in the situation.  Good job!
5. This was a delightful breath of fresh air after the angst in the beginning, and I was delighted to see how they both ended up feeling the same way about each other.  The nervous tension and the breathlessness were easy to feel as well and it made me smile by the time I was done.
6. I found this one to be absolutely fascinating in the sense that I wasn’t sure if he was experiencing a physical or emotional sensation of drowning.  Or both.  And the way in which it was written really leant to the confusion there, but it made his release all the more powerful at the end when he finally found salvation.
7. The title didn’t help give me any idea of what to expect when I read this, but at the end, I had to hold my breath in turn.  You painfully show how trying too hard or loving too much can drive those we care about away, but how time shows the other person it was not meant to hurt them.  But by then, that rejection may already be too much, and it’s such a bitter situation.  *sniffs*  Well done for bringing it to life.
8. On the other hand, ‘Madness’ is an apt title for this one and you portray it in its horrific splendor.  The short, choppy sentences add urgency and increase the feelings of not being able to breathe.  And the downward spiral of self-doubt and loss of self-worth is abruptly ended with the hint of what I can presume is death.  Another commenter wondered if the twinkle twinkle was a knife and I am inclined to wonder/agree in turn.  Well done though.
9. Another one with a strangely appropriate title and the similarly angsty feel as most of them thus far.  It’s interesting how you show that we can become a mere shadow of ourselves when the one we love passes on.  And I found it intriguing how he saw her, or thought he did anyway, which finally allowed them to be together again after all that sadness.  It was bittersweet in the end, but in a good way.
10. This was entirely unexpected but utterly delightful in the twist at the end.  Especially since it sounded so angsty in the beginning and whatnot, but it ended up being a rather humorous affair instead.  I never imagined that describing a toxic fart could be so poetic.  Bravo and well done!  Lol
11. Ugh!  Another story of unrequited love!  T_T  But this time, there’s ‘a glimmer of hope’ at the end, and I do rather love that twist. The whole time I thought she was pining for Simon but then that changed at the end and it made me smile.  Lovely job!
12. This one just made me sad.  There’s really no other way to say it.  I actually hurt for her because of her focus on the numbers and how that had somehow become a measure of her worth.  It’s even more painful because there’s no release and no light at the end of the tunnel.  She’s just trapped in this cycle of despair and it .  So good job for portraying that.  It’s well written, just sad and depressing.  Haha
13. It’s ironic here how his desire to breath is fulfilled by drowning, or so I’m interpreting in this case.  Definitely another sad one, especially because he did have someone there to help stave off the darkness at first, until he left.  I wasn’t sure where it was going at first and then it became clear by the end so nicely done in telling such a story in so few words.
14. This was the one I cast my vote for and it was beautiful, if also bittersweet in its own way.  I loved the idea of the phoenix and powers and I would absolutely adore seeing more of this world.  But I also like how you manage to tell such a huge story in so few words.  Awesome job!
15. Okay.  This was creepy, especially because I don’t know who was telling them to open their eyes.  Being trapped in small spaces is bad enough but to be stuck in a coffin is probably terrifying.  You manage to convey that discovery and fear quite well and it’s not exactly easy to read for that reason, due in no small part because the situation indicates an unwanted death sentence for the character.
16. I thought this story was bittersweet in the sense that the relationship doesn’t feel whole or complete; it feels like one wants to move on (to something else) and the other won’t let it happen.  Despite the protestations of love, it’s hard to say if they are in love, but it was a nice change of pace in that they are at least both together and somehow making things work.
17. My biggest question here would be ‘What happened to make him feel this way?!’  Other than that, the whole description and the beautiful details of his falling apart like that were excellently portrayed.  It starts off small and almost insignificant, like the first drops of rain, but then it builds into this all consuming thing by the end, and I’m left wondering if he just passed out (I’m hoping that’s the case) or he actually died.  So well done with that.
18. Yay for a mermaid AU!  Even if I’m not entirely sure what was going on.  Lol  I’m presuming Irene is a human here, since she and her sisters were dancing at some point (though mermaids can dance too), and I wouldn’t imagine water being able to easily tear apart a mermaid.  It also sounds like the mermaid at the end was using some kind of glamor to trick Irene into thinking she was one of her sisters.  I could be completely off though.  Either way, I was very intrigued by the story and the way in which you wrote it helped to add urgency to the story.  Awesome job!
19. Another fantasy piece!  Forbidden love is always an interesting topic and when you make it between angels and demons, the potential for tragedy is certainly there.  The way you describe their love and their relationship was absolutely stunning.  And it was oh so bitter the way she had to fall at the end.  I also really liked how you revealed them with that last line too.  Beautiful. 
20. Very introspective.  This was quite the look into someone else’s mind in dealing with more than one identity.  It’s so personal and private that it almost makes it hard to read, but that’s also where the beauty of it lies.  I can only hope this struggle isn’t real when it comes to idols with their own stage presences, but it’s hard to say.  Great job with this though.
21. Amidst the relative sea of angst, this one was another breath of fresh air by the end.  Haha  It’s very easy to relate to trying to perfect something while getting more and more caught up in the fact that you can’t, so it was nice to see that sometimes all it takes is someone else to help pull us out of it.
22. Argh!  The problem I find with fantasy snippets especially is that I want to know more.  Lol  This is a fascinating glimpse into something I can only begin to guess about and it leaves me curious as to what Euna’s people think she is, how they got in the dungeon, how she summoned Jidam in the first place.  So many questions, but definitely an intriguing piece and I wonder just where it is going.  Nicely done though and if you do anything more with it, I would love to see.
23. I don’t know if this one is bittersweet so much as tragic.  O.o  You describe WinWin’s pain and loss very well so there’s no doubting he hurts and that he’s pretty much lost all he has to live for, but though he’s happy, I can’t help but wonder if he will see Kun after this.  It’s not confirmed so I worry.  >.>  But still, it was written very well so good job!
24. This was disturbing.  As one who has many dreams, I can honestly say I would be quite afraid and unsettled after this one too.  I’m still trying to determine if anything about it was symbolic or might have had meaning (from dark to light; being tied up to being pinned down; the crow, etc).  You’ve got me wondering if there’s more to it than what we’re seeing but I can’t tell!  Lol  Interesting drabble though.  Not what I was expecting but well done.