“The Keeper’s Destiny” 

I like the title, it’s simplistic and draws people in :) 

 

Description and Forward/Graphics- 4/5

Description: I have something of a pet peeve towards the  

 

Graphics: The poster is amazing. :)

 

Conclusion: I liked the layout of everything, and your front pages seems pretty solid, so good job, and it is quite aesthetically pleasing :) 

Characterisation: 17/20

Handled really well. I like the way the different characters are portrayed and your descriptions of each character is daebak. 

Plot- 22/25

 

You haven’t really written enough of the plot for me to truly judge but I do hope there are bigger surprises along the way:) You have a really promising writing style and I was pretty hooked!  

Flow- 13/15

I feel like you know what you’re doing in terms of language. I feel like this is one of the only second person pov fics that I’ll truly enjoy because you made it such a easy read and it’s easy to imagine ‘myself’ in the scenario— not too heavy on description and the flow is just right :D 

 

 

Grammar: 10/15

 

No jarring mistakes. I would advice you on reading more and honing your writing style into something more intricate and familiarise yourself with the language:) 

 

Writing Style (originality/author's voice)- 12/15

You do have a unique writing style. I really like it:)