read what I have written so far and tell me their opinion? I feel like something is missing and I could make some parts longer before they get to the dirty (it's gonna be top Luhan for your information~)

comment below and I will send you an extract~ only trustworthy people with fluent English and people with reviewer experience please~

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/545861/poisoned-love-angst-exo-luhan-sehun-hunhan