Chapter 2: Hi love! I saw your "ad" on my wall so I decided to read your fic. I love the plot of your story and I'm sure you'll have really good content in the future; however, I feel like your writing style is particularly choppy due to all of the short sentences. I feel like there could be more flow in your writing if you were to write more compound or complex sentences. I understand English might not be your first language, or English isn't your strongest subject and writing fics help you improve (bc that's what I do hehe), but there's always room for improvement. Sorry if it sounds as if I'm criticizing you :(, but I really like your plot and I think you have so much potential in you; a part of writing fics is that you are able to grow into a better writer.

On the side note, I'm looking forward to your upcoming chapters!! I love how you portrayed Jack and I can't wait for Infinite and BTS to be introduced in the upcoming chapters~