缘分 [Yuánfèn]
Requested by: endless-sonata
Reviewer: Yoon_Jeonghan
Review Requested: July 23rd, 2015
Review Completed & Posted: July 25th, 2015
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Title: (10/10)
The title is really creative as I haven't seen any story witht he same title. I really like it because it is deep and meaningful, which allows the audience to sympathize with the story. It's simple, yet really creative.

Foreword: (13/15)
No layout was used, but a layout is not required for a good story. The description and foreword was literally on point. I loved it. It was elegant, did it's job and the author also added additional dialogue between the characters, which was a really great idea as it tells a bit about the story and it's plot without revealing the whole thing.

Characters: (18/20)
There wasn't any character introduction and desciption of what the characters looked like, but what the author did was introduce the characters through their emotions, actions and family background. Instead of learning what the main character looked like, we learnt that they came from a prominent family and was tired with their life. It was a clever way to introduce the characters and made the audience connect with te characters.

Narative Elements: (27/30)
Third person was used throughout the story and it was constantly used. It made the story flow well and the delivery was great. There were a few minor grammatical errors here and there, but other than that the delivery of the sentences and its structure was really good. The setting wasn't really described, but it didn't really matter especially when the author's descriptions were well written.

Plot and Theme: (31/35)
Running away was used as a theme in the story, which I find really cliche, but mixing it with fate and finding love was a really great idea from the author. Although, there isn't much written yet, I can already tell where the story is coming to. If the author were to add plot twists towards the end of the story, it could really turn this cliche story into something mind-blowing and frustrating for the readers, which would make the story very engaging.

Entertainment Factors: (8/10)
I really enjoyed the story, to the point where I actually subscribed to it on my author account. I really recommend it as the author's descriptions and plot line can really let the readers connect with the characters. I loved all the descriptions and dialogue in the story, and I can really sympathize with the main character and I know most readers could too.

Overall Score: (99/120)

REVIEWER'S NOTE:
Overall, I don't the author really needs to fix anything aside from editing it. The descriptions were great, the character development was on point and the plot line, although cliche, can be improved with plot twists towards the end of the story. I hope the author finishes the story and I can't wait to read it on my other account. Thank you for requesting and sorry for the late request.

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