Catching Feathers

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At the height of the wildly popular group's career, EXO suddenly falls apart at the seams after a tragedy shatters the group. The media scrounging for details to plunge the teenage heartthrobs further. Each of the members suffer through their own personal hell, and the brotherhood they once shared has been cut to pieces.

For Luhan, the visual of the group, his only lifeline to the real world is through a glassy bottle that makes his eyes just as glassy. But he's the only one in the group that harbors a secret to the night where everything went wrong: the night that Oh Sehun died, and he could have stopped it.

A mysterious girl arrives in one of his drunken episodes and saves him from further harm, and he cannot deny his attraction to her, but even she can't save him if he doesn't want to be saved.

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yomiyomiyomi #1
Chapter 1: Hello! So it seems like I am the first one to comment here. ^^
I saw this story and was asking to be reviewed so I gave it a go.
The foreword is kinda confusing. Better yet if it was straight to the point but will still give the reader the 'what-will-happen-next-ohmygod-this-is-good-i-have-to-read-this' feels. You feel me? ㅋㅋㅋ

I like your writing style. ^^ It's the type of writing style that I often find in livejournal fanfics. But I think, when starting the first chapter, one should calmly start first. Uh, how do I explain this
You should set aside the excess adjectives since 80% of he chapter ends up being boring and confusing as for some of the readers. (but I've read some fanfics that handled it well since maybe it's really the way how they write.)
I think chapter 1 should start as the starting point where the setting and the characters are slowly being introduced. Just avoid using too much adjectives cause the eyes tend to jump out some sentences and ends up not reading it. (#truestory) u____u
But in this case, I think you handled it pretty well. :D (hooray for that)
Chapter 1 is okay. For me. ^^ 8 out of 10 shinning, golden stars, I think.
Have you figured out your writing style yet? :)

I'm so sorry if my review was not clear enough ugh :c but I hope you got my point :c
but if not well..... >.>

Have a great day! x
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