Chapter 1: really funny and cute! <3 though you may want to reread it. All the mistakes it has can be easily corrected once read through. for example the sentence: "Said buried buried lets our a groan of frustration." should be: "Said buried man lets out a groan of frustration."
It contains the biggest mistake, so it's not all that bad, but if you read it over, you can correct them and make it a lot better to read ^^
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