Chapter 1: ak ak ak, Too short, isn't it?

Chapter 1: short story will be good if that still short story. I mean, although I can imagine every possible scene, just to make it 'perfect' in my mind, just let it be. reader can make their own imagination, while you gave us the plot, kkkk. Great authornim.

Chapter 1: Hmmm...
Well, for starters the plot was nice, short and sweet. Though the ff is short, I was able to understand their history that helped readers like me to get the picture better. Well done on that. The hmmm...only thing I probably would want to point out is I don't know...the writing style? Though fancy writing style (by the use of wide variety of words etc) is great to read from time to time as it shows the writer's wide vocabulary and eloquence, simple and to-the-point writing style never loses its charms. It's just as powerful and captivating.

I don't know...just my point of view. The reason I say that is at times, I felt lost and confused with what you're trying to paint in your reader's imagination. Other than this, good job.

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Chapter 1: Love it. Aigoo choding yong! Hehe

I like it.. short and simple.. want to know it from yong POV though.. want a sequel!!! and sorry for my earlier spoiler comment.. I edit it again now for you not nag at me.. but he should really suffer a bit here authorniim.. happy april fool day

Chapter 1: Ahhh april fool ,i have get that today. I hate the fact of april fool but i like your story