Chapter 1

MAMACITA: Secrets of San Mar Valley
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Oh MinJi enters a small town called San Mar Valley in search of a bounty hunter who could be her last hope to catch her father's killer.

The train was close to its destination, at least she guessed. She frankly had no idea that the travel time to the next town would take so long. She, went by the name of MinJi. Oh MinJi. For nearly two years MinJi had been traveling from town to town in search of a certain someone. She heard he was the only one who could help her in her mission. Everyone in the town before this one said that he was already gone and was headed for the next one. That was over a week ago, she hoped she wasn't too late again. Something clicked in her mind when the train came to an official stop. She will find him this time, she will. She just knew this town will be the place where all of her questions will finally be answered. She just knew it. She read the sign as she hopped off the train with her small bag on her shoulder, the wooden board being so big and tall she had to arch her neck back to read it.

Welcome to San Mar Valley.

She passed the sign and immediately scanned around for any sign of him. Nope, there was no one she saw who fit the description just yet. She will have to do what she always does when she first comes to a new town. Ask around and see where they will possibly lead her next.

As MinJi walked, she passed by some of the citizens who were on an afternoon stroll with their friends or significant other. To her left, she saw the town jail. She didn't take much interest in it until an inmate ran up to the metal bars, making her jump. The inmate reached his hand out, trying to get MinJi's attention.

"Hey, hey you!" The inmate called out to her, making her stop in her tracks. "Please, you're a kind citizen, right? Can I ask an important favor of you?"

"No, I'm not breaking you out of jail if that's what you're thinking." MinJi replied, rolling her eyes at him.

"No, I'm not asking you to do that. Although I wouldn't mind if you did something so generous." The prisoner charmingly smiled. "Can you please find Missy and ask her if she's still faithful to me? She's blonde and beautiful, so can you please ask her? I don't want her fooling around with other men while I'm still stuck in here."

"Sure. I'll, I'll ask her." MinJi replied, not wanting to talk to him anymore.

"Really?" The prisoner got excited. "Thank you! Thank you so much! I'm Leeteuk, it's a pleasure to meet you!"

"Oh MinJi." MinJi said, but declined to shake his hand when he held it out to her.

MinJi left without another word to Leeteuk. She had more important things to do than find a prisoner's girlfriend. Her eyes found the saloon across the street, thinking of it as the perfect place to start. Everyone goes into the saloon, someone might've seen the person she was looking for, or maybe he was in there at that very moment. It was a possibility for sure. There were definitely a lot of people when she entered, very crowded like a party. She immediately went and sat at the bar, next to a girl with long black hair who was having a drink. The bartender should know something, how could he not?

"What can I get you?" The bartender asked her as he dried a glass with a towel.

"Oh just, regular beer." MinJi said as she settled in her seat.

"Leenah, beer." The bartender called to the girl standing behind him.

"Right away, Heechul." Leenah responded, grabbing a beer mug.

"Hey, I was wondering," MinJi tried getting Heechul's attention, "Have we met before? You're familiar."

"Can't say we have." Heechul answered, patting Leenah's casually. "We've been living here for over a year now. I'm guessing you're new here, am I right?"

"Yes! I knew you were a newcomer the moment you entered!" The girl with the black hair smiled big. "I'm Kim SoonYee, it's nice to meet you."

"Well, I'm not staying forever." MinJi admitted when Leenah set the beer down in front of her. "I'm just looking for a bounty hunter. Do you know where I can find him?"

"I didn't know we had bounty hunters around here." SoonYee pouted curiously, "They're usually running around the much larger cities."

"You should ask Cho Kyuhyun." Leenah pointed across the room.

"Sure, because gamblers know everything, right?" Heechul mumbled sarcastically.

Leenah rolled her eyes and pointed more accurately for MinJi. "Do you see that guy playing cards over there? Go ask him, he might know."

"Thank you!" MinJi immediately stood and ran over to go speak to this,Cho Kyuhyun.

"Okay now. If you win this one, then you get to kiss me." Kyuhyun tapped a girl's nose. "If you lose, I win the ten dollars you're hiding in your dress. Deal?"

"Okay." The girl giggled, obviously swooning over him. She could care less if he took all her money, considering how good looking he was. MinJi couldn't really blame her for it. His dark hair, round face, one hell of a warm smile that made his chocolate eyes sparkle. It was enough for any girl to swoon over.

Kyuhyun put three cards on the table, and starting shuffling them around to mix them up. Adding to his handsome look, he wore a nice dark pinstripe suit and tie. MinJi noticed how he was able to sneak cards in and out of his sleeves as he shuffled them. 

"Where is the queen, Veronica?" Kyuhyun teased as he shuffled the cards. "Where is she?"

Veronica pointed to the one in the middle once he stopped shuffling. It ended up being a ten of clubs instead of the wanted queen of hearts.

"I'm so sorry, you didn't win this time." He was obviously not sorry. "Come on, ten dollars. Cough it up."

Veronica reached into her corset and pulled out her money, upset that she lost once again.

"Don't be sad, you'll have a shot next game." Kyuhyun patted her shoulder, then leaned in closer to her. "Maybe I'll treat you and let you kiss me for just this once."

Veronica's mood perked up at his words. She wasted no more time and immediately kissed him. MinJi felt awkward when she approached them. This guy was going to help her? It didn't seem likely. He was handsome all right. It was his personality that was the issue.

"Excuse me?" MinJi stood across the table from him. He didn't seem to be listening. "Excuse me? Cho Kyuhyun?"

"Yes?" Kyuhyun immediately broke the kiss at the sound of his name.

"Hi, I'm Oh MinJi. I'm not from around here." MinJi awkwardly waved to him, even though he was right back to focusing on his cards. "Them, over there? Heechul and Leenah? They told me that you could tell me where the bounty hunter is?"

"Are you asking me or telling me?" Kyuhyun glanced up at her.

"I'm telling you?" MinJi groaned at herself when she realized she was saying everything like a question. "So, you know where I can find him...Right?"

"No."

MinJi immediately became annoyed. Was he seriously being difficult? "Well if you see him, can you tell me?"

"No."

"Why not?"

"Because why should I?" He smirked, "Right?"

"Please, I'm begging you." MinJi tried to control her growing annoyance for this man. "It's important that I find him."

"Ooh, I like when a girl begs for me." Kyuhyun his lips as he looked up at her with that suave smile "I haven't seen him around for a couple of days. If you find him, let me know. Because I need to discuss an important offer with him."

"Well I have an offer for him too." MinJi rested her hands on the table.

"Well who says yours is more important?" Kyuhyun put down his cards and leaned in closer to her.

"Because mine is actually serious." MinJi leaned in closer as well.

"I highly doubt that."

"Kyuhyun?" Another guy interrupted them. He was sitting next to Kyuhyun. He was petite but handsome, and wore glasses with a long white jacket. His skin was tanner than Kyuhyun and MinJi's. His hair was a silky raven black color that brushed ever so slightly over his eyes. He had such a sweet and innocent face like someone who could say and do no wrong. He got Kyuhyun's attention again, "Can you make Jennifer leave me alone?"

Jennifer, another saloon girl, was all over him. It was obviously making the poor guy uncomfortable. MinJi saw that he was trying to stare at someone from across the room and Jennifer was nothing but a distraction.

"Okay girls, why don't you scoot, okay?" Kyuhyun shooed them off, making them sigh. "Now now girls. It's just that my friend here is preoccupied and we'll just have to do this hangout some other time. Okay? Okay. Now scoot."

"Bye, Ryeowookie." Jennifer waved to him. Ryeowook didn't care. He rested his chin in his hand and continued staring at who he thought was the most beautiful girl in town.

"Seriously, Ryeowook? No matter how hard I try you're still not giving up on her?" Kyuhyun scolded him. "Fine. Just do that forever. Just stare at her until you die."

MinJi turned to see who Ryeowook was staring at. He was clearly staring at the girl sitting across the room who had long golden blonde hair and was incredibly beautiful. Her skin was fair and smooth. Her lips were perfectly plump and she had the most seductive eyes that ironically also held a sense of innocence behind them. Her hair was her most eye-catching feature from how it glowed like fine gold under the light. She didn't wear a dress like every other girl here. She wore a simple white shirt with black pants that hugged her waist with knee-length black boots. MinJi immediately shot over to her thinking she was the one Leeteuk, the prisoner, was talking about. After all, there was no one with blonde hair here.

"Excuse me," MinJi waved to get her attention, "Are you Missy?"

"I feel like I should be offended by that question." The girl replied, making a confused expression appear on MinJi's face. "You did just confuse me for the town after all."

"I'm sorry, I didn't know." MinJi looked at her feet. "I'm new here and I was supposed to ask this girl Missy a question for this guy-"

"Leeteuk wanted you to ask Missy if she is still faithful to him?" The girl softened her tone.

"How did you know-"

"He asks everybody." The girl immediately answered. "Don't worry about it."

"So, who are you anyway?" MinJi asked, looking away from her feet and at the girl.

"Kim Sungah." She smiled a little. Her smile was very pretty. It was so angelic it even made MinJi's heart skip a bit. She could only imagine how it made Ryeowook feel.

"Well, Kim Sungah," MinJi leaned in so she could whisper someth

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cicmel13
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Chapter 2: Chapter 1: Almost sobbing this first chapter is so sad! I feel so bad for MinJi she had to watch her father die, but still stayed silent per his request. And to top it off she doesn’t have her mother’s ring anymore?
Charlot1081
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Chapter 23: As the last chapter, I want to go over all of the characters.
First of, Minji. Minji had her father stolen from her and she was destined to find the man who killed him. She went to the town to find the bounty hunter, who had a big story of his own. Her perception of each character changed as the story went on. The way I see it, is that Minji has a very malleable opinion. Where she will change her mind given a circumstance. That being said, she could be easily tricked, as she was fooled by Heechul's calm demeanor at the beginning and weary of Kyuhyun's suspicious behavior.
Kyuhyun is where he is today because he's a natural protector. He wanted to protect his mother and Henry and even Zhoumi. He stood up against the tyrants who wanted to steal money from Zhoumi, accidentally killing one of them. The Chinese mafia decided to take revenge by taking out the people he cared for to "teach" Kyuhyun a lesson. This made Kyuhyun stone cold and sometimes he relives his past. Whenever he gets put in a familiar situation, it's like something in him snaps and he forgets that this is reality. It could be seen again with Sungah and Jack; Ryeowook and Sungah; and Sungah with Eunhyuk's bull fighting. He's a protector and won't stop at anything to kill someone to protect.
Donghae is an interesting one. He's been through literal hell by the people who were supposed to take care of him. The Church is a place you should be getting guidance and discipline, not torture. I hate it when people call orphans rejects. Donghae and Yesung thrived off each other's energy. And while Yesung's adulthood was short, he explored everything he ever wanted to: alcohol, , and being a hunter. Donghae still has emotional and physical scars, but he's able to contain himself relatively well.
Ryeowook had the most character development, in my opinion (not just because he's my bias). He went from being a scared giraffe to a courageous stallion. I know he wasn't able to keep Sungah safe in the end, but he genuinely cared about her. He had his eyes on her since the day they met, he bit his tongue, and got walked all over just so he could make Sungah happy. I'm glad that they could share "I love you" and die in each other's arms.
Leeteuk and Shindong were a mess! XD They're funny but stupid. I could never tell if Leeteuk was drunk or sober, because he acted the same in either state! It's giving old Western movies with the henchmen who can't do anything right. I'm here for it <3 Heechul thought he was slick, but involving those two in his plot was the biggest mistake.
Sungmin and the mafia were interesting. Like the mafia "cared" about family, yet Sungjin was literally disowned and killed. What logic? I'm glad Sungmin got out of there. I hope that the people at the capital don't search for him though. Seeing one of his men killed on that train is a clear sign something in San Mar is going down.
Giving a big shout out to the ladies and Kangin for making it out alive (aside from Sungah). Hopefully Kangin and Missy can be right for each other. ^^

Over all, it was a wonderful story! I'm so glad I had the opportunity to read it. <3 Good luck with the sequel (and I voted Wookie in your poll, if that was even a surprise).
Charlot1081
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Chapter 22: So much happened in this chapter, oh my goodness. Where do I begin? Heechul, you know damn well nothing has ever changed. The moment you killed Yesung was the moment you didn't value life anymore. It wasn't just stealing anymore, it was murder. You didn't care how many people you had to kill to get what you wanted. I'm sure he would even kill Leenah if it meant he could fulfill his desires. Leenah loves the toxic relationship - she only agrees to Heechul's crimes because she loves him. Nope.. She's mentally ill at that point. Especially if at the end, she didn't see anything wrong. Now let's talk about the end of this chapter....

YOU KNOW I LOVE WOOKIE!! How could yoU!! My poor baby Wookie and Sungah! How- why- Sadness.. I can understand why Wook would shoot himself, the one thing that brought him happiness; the person he had to wait so long to have.. Kyuhyun had to watch Wook and Sungah die, just like he saw Henry and his mother die. Tears of pain.. Donghae, I don't blame you for wanting to kill Heechul, but yes, I think it's best if you go take a stroll to calm your nerves. After everything that happened, he doesn't want to invite Soonyee with him just for the possibility of her getting killed too. Yesung lived his best life out of the orphanage, I don't think he had any regrets lol Maybe not getting one more shot of liquor in. XD I love how Shindong and Leeteuk just wake up AFTER all of the drama. They're like, Huhhhhh? XD Like yeah, you guys missed it lol
Charlot1081
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Chapter 21: Aigoo~ The teamwork in this chapter! I like how Eunhyuk and Minji actually got along and didn't cause any trouble. I mean, I was a little scared when Eunhyuk was going to be on their team, but he proved himself to be useful! I actually liked Leeteuk's method. He kinda did help.. Just a bit. It made everyone confused, it created an opening to start fighting hahah But it's such a Leeteuk thing to just say, "peace~" And jump out of the train lol Sungmin redeemed himself though. He shot one of his men, the dude who tortured Kyuhyun in the beginning. I think that was perfect. Kyuhyun has been through a lot, but after being protected by the person he thought betrayed him, I think it's safe to say he won't hold a grudge on the moment anymore. The last thing to do is get Leeteuk, Heechul, and Shindong arrested: then everyone can have their closure.
I can't wait to see what Kangin, Sungah, and Ryeowook have been up to while the others almost died~ ^^
Charlot1081
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Chapter 20: Immediately, I was so relieved. Like yes, Sungmin was sent to actually kill Kyuhyun. But he decided he didn't want the heir and he didn't want to kill Kyuhyun. He wanted to live on as if nothing ever happened. The unfortunate part is that he did kinda betray Kyuhyun. While he didn't kill Kyuhyun's family, it was Sungmin who informed the family about Kyuhyun. I'm glad that Kyuhyun had both the support of Sungah and Minji. But the revelation! It was Leeteuk and Heechul who killed Minji's father! I honestly didn't see that coming. Now hearing how Leeteuk was a masked man on the train and killed Yesung, I was starting to get suspicious. But this- nope, didn't see it. Does Heechul remember Minji? Or was it something he forgot as he turned into a "changed man?" I know he didn't see Minji, but I wonder if he made the connection. I'm super happy for Eunhyuk and Victoria's relationship! It's getting better, but it's still a bit bumpy.
Now the end, where Missy is being all flirty. Like girl, come now, you know he's taken. But I won't blame Kyuhyun if he did something to her to get the information. I mean, hormones are real. And Missy probably hasn't gotten any for a day or two lol Bring it on!!
I just wanna say, Heechul and Leeteuk are giving sibling energy. One always has to be the "responsible" one while the other one does whatever they want. Perhaps if Leeteuk didn't follow Heechul, they wouldn't be in trouble. But I still feel like Heechul would have tried getting the crown. He lost it when Siwon got shot. Lucky for me, I watched the MV *snaps fingers a few times* he didn't die~~ Heheh
Charlot1081
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Chapter 19: Okay, but seriously, Eunhyuk is giving spicy Latina vibes. I work with a lot of Hispanic ladies, and it brings me back to their Spanglish. XD I also see that Wookie and Sungah are having their little bit of romantic time over there. They can't keep their hands off each other too~ 😏You know Heechul is out of options when he starts blackmailing. He knew he would get under Kyuhyun's skin by exposing Sungmin like that. When he said Sungmin was the mafia leader's son, I literally stood up and walked away from my laptop for almost a whole minute - staring out of the window as everything I knew had been a lie. I know how Kyuhyun felt after Heechul exposed Sungmin. Remembering about his mom and Henry's death, I can understand why he turned to rage. Even if Sungmin changed, he shouldn't have kept that from Kyuhyun. Unfortunately, I don't think there would have been any good way for Sungmin to tell Kyuhyun though. There would be no trust between them, because Kyuhyun is always there to avenge his family. I see his and Sungah's relationship more as a mother-son relationship. Because from the moment he saw Sungah in trouble with Jack, he saw it as an opportunity to correct himself - to protect the lady in danger. He couldn't protect his mother, but he could protect Sungah. It's going to take a minute or two for Kyuhyun to recover from today, but I hope he'll come to terms soon. For the sake of the town.
Charlot1081
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Chapter 18: Shindong and Leeteuk are the hilariously doomed duo. You have one who can't shoot and then you have another one who has no control. But they're both kinda dumb. What do you expect though? (Especially with Leeteuk) I wasn't impressed with Heechul's manipulation. Leenah, you can find a better person to be your kiddo's father figure. Heechul's gonna go to jail, and you know it. *smh* Leeteuk had one job and he failed horribly. Heechul, you promised Leenah a good life, and now you're letting her friends get hurt without a care in the world. And that's what greed does to you. He wants Sungmin's crown so he can sell it and get money. If he kept working hard with honesty, he can provide a happy life for Leenah and his kid. But he wants more. And that has been Heechul's mistake.
Charlot1081
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Chapter 16: From the beginning of the chapter and evil till the end of the chapter, I kept saying: "Yesung is too loose, he's too much of a party boy. He's gonna die because he's reckless." Uhhhh Yeah. Yesung, I love yah honey, but.. Dude. You were supposed to listen to Donghae and go about things better. But Yesung took the Donghae approach, which is to just start hitting. While that's slightly worked for Donghae, you should have kinda stepped back, Yesung. It is sad that Yesung's dad is the mafia leader. I know Donghae's next mission is to kill him. As for the masked men... LEETEUK!! How dare you be a part of Donghae's past. I don't know how Donghae hasn't just shot Leeteuk yet (current time). Cuz like.. I would have.
And on a less serious note.. Donghae and Yesung had been sleeping around a lot on their journeys (well especially Yesung, since he's a player). I wonder if they have any children they don't know about. XD
Charlot1081
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Chapter 15: Poor baby Donghae.. It's heartbreaking to know that Donghae had to see both of his parents die, and his sister. Seeing his father shoot himself was even more devastating. I wish that his father gave him to a friend or brought him to another town. He didn't deserve the mistreatment. Thankfully, I've never had to go to a Catholic school, but I have a friend that did. She didn't get beat up, but she was definitely mistreated. I can just imagine, Yesung in the dark corner, shaking every time the door to the cellars opens. Always living in the shadow because he knows that he's just a mistake. While sister Kim loves him, she can't show it in front of Park. I know that the boys got out safely, but I have a suspicion that either Kim was put in the cellar the next morning, or beaten to death by Park. She's not going to be set free unless it's through death, which might be better than being trapped in the orphanage.
I feel like there's more to Donghae's past though, that can't be it. I have a feeling that Yesung is going to be murdered, and I dunno if I'm ready for it. We'll have to see~
Charlot1081
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Chapter 14: YAS Wook's side of the story!! I feel so bad for Wookie, he always had love for Sungah. During the western era, classrooms weren't too big yet. In early America days, before Americans declared independence from the Crown, many children were homeschooled. Teachers with a what we now know as a high school diploma came to each house of lords to teach the children. Classrooms were introduced in the late 1800s and early 1900s. Arranged marriages are still a thing, especially in Asian culture, so with Sungah being married off to wealth is very realistic. The unfortunate part is that most wealthy men in this time period were snobs and didn't care much for their women. I'm glad that Wook wanted to kill Jack himself, and got to shoot the fatal bullet. That was definitely the closure he needed.
Let's agree with Hannah: take the fake mustache off, Siwon. You're having a mid-life crisis lol Kyuhyun is already killing people and it was his first day out of Siwon's house! Dude! Chill! I like how one of the only rules was to NOT have a weapon and the first thing he did was swipe Siwon's gun XD Kudos for Kyuhyun killing that guy though. He was literally scum.
So Sungmin started it!! He wanted a little mafia of his own hahah Maybe he did something illegal in the capital, hm?