Story: Beauty

Reviewer: Exotics44

It’s not a bad title but it does not stand out.

Description: 4.5/5

There was a teeny tiny mistake: “One tragedy, A girl that has lost everything.” The A should be non-capital.

Grammar: 7/10.

You have quite a lot of mistakes. I don’t think I need to go through them with you. Just proofread your chapter.

Vocabulary: 5/10

You use simple words to describe a character or his/her actions. Reading more books would help you a lot in this area especially novels.

Effect on me: 8/10

I love Exo and APink but the storyline didn’t interest me a lot.

Flow: 10/10

The story’s progression is good!

Sentence Structure: 7.5/10

You have quite a number of commas in your sentences.

Quotes: ----

Not applicable but I will give you the points as bonus.

Poster: ----

Not applicable but I will give you the points as bonus.

Characters: 16/20

You can improve more in this area.

Juliet: She seems like an emotionless girl who always keeps quiet about her suffering. I would be able to find an OC like that anywhere.

Kris: I assume he is the main character. I feel that he is genuinely concerned about Juliet but he does not know how to express his concern.