Chapter 1: how does this not have any comments yet? this is the greatest thing ever. and i don't believe that english isn't your first language ! haha, seriously though, i really enjoyed it. i don't really mind that you didn't give the specifics of the location, how the war started and all that, as this seems to really just be a character study of luhan; but if you really wanted to polish this story up at some point in time, detailing the setting might be something you do. it doesn't have to be a real place or historical event. you didn't have one at all and the story still flowed fine, but it could be more vivid. hope this helps!