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story titleone/five points
I think I can see where the idea for your story is coming from - I’m guessing it’s because Mingyu is slowly turning around in Jisoo’s visions and drawings? If that’s not the right explanation, then I’m completely at a loss. To be honest, I would encourage writers to choose titles that are easy to tell they’re relevant to their plots. For me, it’s a little off-putting to have to try and figure out what the title means especially since it doesn’t really show in the plot. Perhaps it’s just me being a little too slow and not understanding it, but the title didn’t really look like it’s linked to the story nor did it appeal to me.
description, foreword & tagsten/ten points
The description of your story does its job well - it gives your readers an overall summary of your plot while it’s not giving away too much information. It’s short and simple, but the impact is strong. For the foreword, you added an extract from your story, which I really like, since you’re giving your readers a taste of your writing style as well as what to expect in plot. Your tags seem good to me!
appearance: graphics-/five points, layoutfive/five points
The overall display of your story is clean and simple, but is just me or is your font really small?
characterisationfifteen/fifteen points
The only character that I can really comment on in your story is Jisoo, since he’s the main focus. First, let me say congratulations for creating Jisoo as a character. In my opinion, he’s well developed and has enough depth to his character. He’s persistent and stubborn about his visions, standing his ground regardless of what others say, especially when Seungcheol confronts him about his ‘boyfriend’. He keeps a calm face whatever happens and he’s very protective of himself and his visions. I don’t really know what else to say about Jisoo other than he’s a very successful character!
Other characters like Seungcheol and Jeonghan are very important to the story, in my opinion, since they’re able to pick up the tiny things about Jisoo that others don’t see, which moves the story on from one part to another. I can’t say much about Mingyu since he doesn’t really ‘appear’ in the story until the very end.
plotseventeen/twenty points
Your plot is interesting, though very confusing at
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