☼ In Statera Et Iter
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In Statera Et IterSuhyo07
story titleone/five points
Honestly, I had no idea whatsoever what the title meant until I google translated it, and even so, I’m still unsure of the real meaning. Apparently, according to google translate, the title means “the balance is again”, though I don’t think I can trust it completely. I would suggest writing a little definition in your description or foreword to explain the title, otherwise no one would know what it means unless they speak Latin (google translate told me this was in Latin). However, if the translation is somewhat accurate, I can’t really see how it links in with your story at the moment, since there really isn’t much yet.
description, foreword & tagssix/ten points
Your description is interesting, I must say, and it did intrigue me quite a bit. It gives some information about the story and the characters, but not so much that it would spoil the story. It’s good that you’ve written a little abstract of your story in the foreword because your readers would be able to get a little feel of what it’s like to read your story. As for your tags, they seem okay to me, though I probably would cut down on a few of them to keep it simple.
appearance: graphicsfive/five points, layoutfour/five points
The poster is very well made. It suits the theme of the story well and it matches with your background image, well done!
The general display and layout of your story is okay, though I personally prefer it if the text is in the same size and font since it would look a lot cleaner and clearer to read. I’m not sure if it’s my own settings but I think you can enlarge the font a little bit so it’s easier to read.
characterisationten/fifteen points
At this point, it’s very hard to judge your characters, but from what I’ve gathered from reading your story so far, I can see your main focus is on Hyunwook, your original character. He seemed to emotionally rely on his deceased lover a lot, since he was obvious distraught over the latter’s death. Other than that, he seemed to have a strange place in his family - I can’t tell whether he’s in an important position in the family or not, but since his mother and siblings don’t seem to be hostile towards him, he might be one of those “normal” family members who doesn’t really stand out against the others. I’d say his character is quite consistent at the moment, and his actions do match the feel he gives off. There is a lot you can develop on though, but that will naturally happen when your plot progresses.
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