Chapter 3: Interesting concept
Love to see more

Chapter 3: Wow looking forward to this read plz udate soon~

Chapter 1: ...Well Ouch.

Chapter 3: My advice is I guess is to make sure all the characters are in character? XD also, I love your story. You should update soon! :D

Chapter 3: XIUHAN XIUHAN XIUHAN PLEEEEEEESSSSSEEE XIUHAN

Chapter 3: Srsly at first i was thinking tht your a homophobic bcs your explanation is smh made me uhhhffffwhyyy and i thot youre not really fond of chanbaek, hence you wrote like tht ;;; but idk exactly i hope your far from that lol i still need your updates your writing is interesting and you got a hook in your writing ilysm lols

Chapter 3: Furthermore, I believe that reading stories with very good vocabularies will help you in your writing status. I also read that you English is not your first language and it's understandable because people with A+ English could still struggle in writing stories. Like I said, the way you wrote the second chapter wasn't strong but the content got me really reeled in and made me want to read your story even more. However, when I reach the second half of your third chapter, I'm just really confused because you started to mix Lay's thoughts along with your third person POV. Logically speaking, third person shouldnt be able to know what one is thinking, therefore you should, in a way, use a differently style when writing one's thoughts. For example, making it in italics. The flashback when CEO gave Lay the contract really helped me differentiate when is when and what is which. If that makes any sense.

Sorry if I seem like I dont enjoy your story. I really do, and I really want you to continue this. I'm curious of what other ideas you have for them. Also you said this is a baekyeol fic? So there must be a point where their hate for each other benefit for them both in ehm some ways. I hope you don't get pissed off over my long comment and report me. and I hope you update soon

Chapter 3: Hi so I just came across this from the baekyeol fics recommendations on tumblr and I thought it was pure genius to be conspiring against the entertainment industry (just like what I am with my ongoing fic though I'm stuck rn but ignore that). Anyways, I find ideas like yours are pure genius. Making yeol like an arrogant character and baekhyun the nice kid, 2 characters very different from everyday baekyeol fics - especially bc this is a self proclaimed non-au (but could be categorised as a band!au). It's smart, making that choice. There was a time where I was also contemplating on how yeol would be like in my fic and this option has crossed my mind tho I didn't take it and used arrogant yeol as a character in another fic, I have to admit it's a very smart move. Also, I really like how you conspire against "We Are One" and later expanding the idea, making them look more like a puppet, more like a slave to the entertainment industry. How they are staged to do everything else and it makes readers wonder like what the , because I went what the because I am a hardcore chanbaek shipper like why else would I be in a chanbaek fic recommendations tumblr if I wasn't right. I feel that you've done really well on that part. My favorite chapter so far is still the first chapter. It's a very strong first chapter. It's made to look like an article and the little brackets [like these] you used makes it even more realistic because korean translated articles are mostly like that, so I give props for the details.

However, I was kind of lost in the third chapter. Your usage of a third person POV in the second chapter wasn't terrible though I have to say it wasn't excellent either. I'm not that much of a good writer myself (not yet I hope) and I'm still learning a lot and it's comments from my friends and my subscribers about the way I write is what makes me want to grow and to learn.

Chapter 1: I actually read this kind of post posted by an ex-trainee before. Guess you read that post too. Whatever it is, this fic sounds interesting.

Chapter 3: i say baekyeol please