The twins were returning back to japan after one year. When they arrive, there mother had message them saying she will be away for couple of months because of work and they would be alone and that a female renter would be staying with them.
Chapter 2: This chapter is more interesting than the previous one.
But much shorter in length.
Noticed some small errors in the writing. Reread and fix them.
Still, the plot is nothing that original as before.
However, i may carry on reading this series a while longer.
Chapter 1: Very simple plot.
The dialogues are nothing new or original either.
Have read those kinds so many times before. Fanfiction.net is swarming with them.
Still,this chapter was somewhat entertaining.
You should have written what anime this originates from.
Suzimiya Harui or something?
Also, the intro has misspellings and wrong grammar. You better fix them. They are simple.
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