It's You [Neorago]

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Annyeong Haseyo Chingus.. Here I am again.. asking for your comments,critics, opinions and please do subscribe if you like.. hehe ^^, Kamsa Hamnida..!!!

 

Enjoy reading you…!  ^^,

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Kim Leigh (OC)- The best friend of Donghae, [you can replace her name by yours (reader) if you want, coz I not comfortable in using ____ hehe :)]

 

Cho Kyuhyun- has a love interest with Leigh, the evil maknae of Super Junior, will do evil things to her just to have her attention sometimes but more sweet to her all the time actually haha, truly… he is Super In love with her.

 

Seohyun-has a crush on Kyuhyun, will become friend with Leigh, but will turn evil after knowing that Kyuhyun is in love with Leigh.

 

Lee Donghae- Best Friend of Leigh, very protective and kind best friend no love interest with her to make things clear… haha :D

 

Lee Eunhyuk- best friend of Donghae.

 

Lee Sungmin- has a special feeling with Leigh.

 

Kim Yesung- Leigh’s bias… weird turtle lover.

 

Park Leeteuk and Kim Heechul- Weird Hyung to their dongsaengs.

 

Kim Ryeowook –best friend of Henry will be the one helping Sungmin to get Leigh’s attention.

 

Lau Henry- Ryeowook’s best friend, will be the one helping Kyuhyun t get Leigh’s attention and heart.

 

Shindong- clown of the group.

 

Choi Siwon- religious member of Super Junior but sometimes ... haha :D

Foreword

 

“Eventhough you’re the evilest person I know.. I really love your sweet and romantic side, I you will love me forever as much as I love you”

 

 “Sorry for making you cry sometimes , but please do believe that when I say I love you it means I will love you till eternity”

 

“As I promise I will make you happy as your best chingu-brother. “

 

“If you’re Hurting you can cry on my shoulder... Know what... If I were on his shoes I will never make you cry, if you allow me to be a part of your Life just for once. I will make you the happiest girl in the world, and you will make me the happiest man in the world if you just allow me to be a part of your life. “

 

“I thought I’m your bias.. L Then now why are you telling me that you love him? Hehe joke It’s ok as long as my Turtle will love me forever... hehe be happy with him if that’s your decision... You know I’m always here to protect you if he hurts you.. As you bias and friend... haha  J”

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youaremyhappiness #1
Heyy chingu I'm back after a long time, but sad that I won't stay long T_T
Anyways, the story is so good so far ^_^ *UPDATE*
And yes I am Kyu bias :3 LOL
Oh and I also just saw the shout out, thanks so much chingu!!
LUBB YOU <333
fearless_elfzy #2
unnie ..~~your stories so cool~~!
anj_yesung #3
jotwinslove- thanks for the comment :) ^^,<br />
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pinaywriter-chingu salamat sa advice ha.. I really appreciate it.. haha sorry newbie.. ^^, hehehe<br />
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Blue_Sapphire- welcome.. hehe hope you like the short update ^^,<br />
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ILIKEHAESICA- heres the update ^^, hope you like it<br />
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youaremyhappiness- heres the update hehe :) Kyu bias.???<br />
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Bluerain- eehh thanks eonnie :) hehe <br />
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kpopaddictus95- hehe its ok.. miss your updates chingu :)
jotwinslove #4
NICE~
pinaywriter #5
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Chapte 3: The harsh comments<br />
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This .? doesn't mean anything. It's not a good idea to write with the wrong punctuation marks. It makes your work unpleasant to read for people who have experience with writing or editing. <br />
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Again, check your verb tenses. <br />
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The nice comments: <br />
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There were a lot of cute moments, comic relief and closeness moments. ^.^ So I like it. Remember to descibe things in the narration and not just put them as instructions. ^.~<br />
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Example : Imagine him doing a crazy dance can be like this <br />
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He moved his hips from side to side and made a manual rice grinder circular motion with his hands. It was like he scored a goal and doing "winning dance".
pinaywriter #6
But seriously I am looking for the Evil Maknae's moves and her reactions.^>^
pinaywriter #7
1. Mind your tenses. If the action is finished. Then put the right tense. <br />
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There seems to be too many P.O.V. ^.^ Oh well this is a fanfiction. ^.^<br />
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Advice: If you are shifting P.O.V. Do it novel style. ^>^ <br />
http://pinaywriteroraldiarrhea2.blogspot.com/2010/09/formatting-reminders-simplified-for.html<br />
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if you change POV or the scenery changes then it would best to make the first word in the paragraph BOLD. This is just to train you to make you write more like a writer and not just a blogger. ^.^ I have written tons of stuff in my life. And from what I have read back, some of them made me laugh, others made me go "Why the hell did I write this crap?" but ultimately, you want to improve or capture your imagination better. And formats are there for you so you can share it to others better. ^.^
pinaywriter #8
harsh comments chapter 1 : 1. Talking to the reader is kinda weird but breaking that barrier is not a bad thing. There are no definite rules in writing a fan fic anyway. <br />
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2. kiss on the cheek. chick means girl chic means posh chik is I dunno what that is. <br />
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3. Do not capitalize stuff that are common names or nouns. <br />
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Great comments : It's very lively. ^>^ And the conversations are cute!!!
pinaywriter #9
Special mention ako!!! eheehehhee
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