Chapter 1 Goodbye Mokpo Hello SEOUL

It's You [Neorago]

 

--Leigh POV--

I’m so excited to meet again my best friend since childhood believe it or not is Lee Donghae of the famous group Super Junior. Although Donghae is my best friend I have my own Bias Yesung the weird turtle lover.  Yes I like that person very much... haha J Aishhh... whats this actually I got a myself a job at SM entertainment as SM town artists Fashion Stylist/Concept designer.

“Life couldn’t get better... Hey~~! ” I sang while preparing my things. “OMO atlast Super Junior wait for me... Yesung oppa Saranghae..!!! Kya~~!  SEOUL here I come..!” she shouts using her fan girl voice. I got my phone and check if there’s a message form my best chingu Donghae... “Oh I got a message from my Fishy Friend... haha: D” she told herself while holding her phone.

 

*Donghae’s Message*

 

Leigh... Chingu... I will wait for you at Hello Kitty café near the Seoul Subway arasso?

 

*My Reply*

 

Neh oppa... oppa your weird why of all places you prefer Hello Kitty café? Oppa are you gay? : P hehe

 

*Donghae’s Reply*

 

 Mwoh???? Leigh, are you crazy? Babbo..! Michyeo! It’s your favorite Café her in Seoul now you’re asking? Shireo! I hate you!

 

*My Reply*

 

Ohh... haha Mianhe oppa... it’s just weird coz a Super Junior member like you I mean a HOT Super Junior member like you staying or rather waiting for a girl in a girly place called Hello Kitty Café (hehe peace oppa) hehe ok ok.., Done preparing my things oppa wait me their arasso.? I’ll be going now Annyeong oppa! Bogoshippo oppa. Ohh by the way what will you wear so I can easily recognize you oppa?

 

*Donghae’s Reply*

 

Wahh chingu... that why I love you haha I really love the way you calling me HOT… haha I’ll be wearing a Sapphire Blue Hoody with a big Animated Fish drawing on it. Of course... ok ok have a safe trip Chingu don’t forget my present ok? Saranghae chingu... Ohh also sends my hugs and kisses to ahjumma ok? Annyeong!

 

 

--Donghae’s POV—

 

He put his phone and his pocket and stare at the Picture frame in his bedside table flashing his fishy smile he  get the picture frame and stare at the two child hugging each other in the picture.

 I really miss my best chingu.. miss the old days with Leigh, eating and playing with her in the park with other children sleeping with her in the same bed when her parents is not at home last time I saw Leigh is before she went to the state to continue her studies as a college student, that time she’s 16 and I’m 17 and that’s the last time I spend my says as an ordinary person. Even though we can’t see each other in person every day we always communicate through Skype, calling, and texting each other. I really miss her like I always do in our childhood days. Just wanna clear one thing reader I don’t have a love interest or something with my Best Chingu arasso.? I’m just an over protective friend and a loving brother ok? (‘Coz she doesn’t have a blood related brother) “Best Chingu.. Really want to pinch your chubby chicks Palli... Miss you so much” he said as he put back the picture frame in the bedside table.

 

-- Author’s POV –

 

As soon as she finished preparing her things she zipped her Bag and prepared herself. She stared at her own reflection in front of the mirror and smile to herself. She got up and looks around her room then get her things. After checking if her things are complete she locked her room then goes to her mother who was waiting outside with a taxi.

“Take care of yourself there in Seoul and don’t forget to call me as soon as you get there ok?” her mother told her.

“Ne Umma. I will be with Donghae so don’t stress yourself thinking if I’m ok or not arasso? Take care of yourself here. As soon as I get my first salary I will send you some money and some pictures of me Donghae oppa so you will not miss me ok? ” she said as she kissed her mother on the chick then hugged her.

She rode on the Taxi and wave at her mother from the window. She made herself comfortable in the Taxi and talk to the Taxi Driver “Ahjussi to the Mokpo Subway station please”.

As soon as she arrive at the Mokpo Subway station she find a comfortable seat inside the train put her earphone then click her Super Junior playlist then stare outside the window as soon as the train started to travel.

“Bye Mokpo Hello SEOUL..!” she murmured while staring at the scenery outside the window.

 

 

 

 

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Hi you…!   sorry for keeping you waiting for chapter 1.. aishh babbo internet connection i have.. im only using mobile internet the other days thats why i cant update.. and now i think my internet connection is fine so here it is my chapter 1.. please do leave some comments ,critics and suggestion.. all of it is so much appreciated :) kamsa hamnida..! see yah again on Chapter 2..!! ^^,

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youaremyhappiness
#1
Heyy chingu I'm back after a long time, but sad that I won't stay long T_T
Anyways, the story is so good so far ^_^ *UPDATE*
And yes I am Kyu bias :3 LOL
Oh and I also just saw the shout out, thanks so much chingu!!
LUBB YOU <333
fearless_elfzy
#2
unnie ..~~your stories so cool~~!
anj_yesung
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jotwinslove- thanks for the comment :) ^^,<br />
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pinaywriter-chingu salamat sa advice ha.. I really appreciate it.. haha sorry newbie.. ^^, hehehe<br />
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Blue_Sapphire- welcome.. hehe hope you like the short update ^^,<br />
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ILIKEHAESICA- heres the update ^^, hope you like it<br />
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youaremyhappiness- heres the update hehe :) Kyu bias.???<br />
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Bluerain- eehh thanks eonnie :) hehe <br />
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kpopaddictus95- hehe its ok.. miss your updates chingu :)
jotwinslove
#4
NICE~
pinaywriter
#5
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Chapte 3: The harsh comments<br />
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This .? doesn't mean anything. It's not a good idea to write with the wrong punctuation marks. It makes your work unpleasant to read for people who have experience with writing or editing. <br />
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Again, check your verb tenses. <br />
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The nice comments: <br />
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There were a lot of cute moments, comic relief and closeness moments. ^.^ So I like it. Remember to descibe things in the narration and not just put them as instructions. ^.~<br />
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Example : Imagine him doing a crazy dance can be like this <br />
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He moved his hips from side to side and made a manual rice grinder circular motion with his hands. It was like he scored a goal and doing "winning dance".
pinaywriter
#6
But seriously I am looking for the Evil Maknae's moves and her reactions.^>^
pinaywriter
#7
1. Mind your tenses. If the action is finished. Then put the right tense. <br />
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There seems to be too many P.O.V. ^.^ Oh well this is a fanfiction. ^.^<br />
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Advice: If you are shifting P.O.V. Do it novel style. ^>^ <br />
http://pinaywriteroraldiarrhea2.blogspot.com/2010/09/formatting-reminders-simplified-for.html<br />
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if you change POV or the scenery changes then it would best to make the first word in the paragraph BOLD. This is just to train you to make you write more like a writer and not just a blogger. ^.^ I have written tons of stuff in my life. And from what I have read back, some of them made me laugh, others made me go "Why the hell did I write this crap?" but ultimately, you want to improve or capture your imagination better. And formats are there for you so you can share it to others better. ^.^
pinaywriter
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harsh comments chapter 1 : 1. Talking to the reader is kinda weird but breaking that barrier is not a bad thing. There are no definite rules in writing a fan fic anyway. <br />
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2. kiss on the cheek. chick means girl chic means posh chik is I dunno what that is. <br />
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3. Do not capitalize stuff that are common names or nouns. <br />
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Great comments : It's very lively. ^>^ And the conversations are cute!!!
pinaywriter
#9
Special mention ako!!! eheehehhee