Together Forever

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Together Forever

(even if forever doesn't exist)

 It's really funny since we promised each forever but somehow we just screwed everything up.

Love fades in time like everything else so the love we used to share is no exception.

 There was never a forever to start with. We were just curious and young 

It's a pity that all we had never existed. It was never love was it?

But it's not too late yet? We can still be together forever.

Even if forever really doesn't exist in this world

forever will be wherever we're together

Let's be together forever

I love you today 

tommorrow

forever

Foreword

Bc sometimes even after everything, we choose to forgive and forget

we never stopped loving each other and only we would truly know

but some things were never meant to be like you and me

because fate wasn't even with us from the start

but even so, we'll still be together forever

that is my promise to you

i really really love you

today , tomorrow

forever

 

A/n :I hope you'll enjoy this hunhan fic that i find cliche but i tried okay. Subsribe comment and upvote :-) 

( i know it looks so plain but idk how to use overlay. Sorry for extremely inregular updatesss ily)

 

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AmbiBambii #1
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Overall, everything was pretty decent. One thing I was disappointed about was by the fact the dialogue is so poorly written. Since English is primarily your first language, I was expecting to see better dialogue. You put periods at the end of questions when it should be a question mark, and sometimes you don't even put a period at all.
In addition, sometimes you make it weird, like " Luhan did this !"
That is not grammatically correct, and honestly, it's one of my pet peeves.
My last negative review is that you make Sehun sound too dumb. Yes, I understand that he's 4, but my nephew, who turned 5 not too long ago, has better English than him. If you explained the fact that maybe Sehun has autism or something that would prevent him to actually speak like a normal human, then I would let that slide.
However, there are pros then cons, so kudos to you.
The plot was very distinctive and interesting. It's not an average love story. The plot is very intriguing.
Your wide range of vocabulary helps a lot as well. Vocabulary is where people screw up a lot, and I was really surprised when you added words a regular teenager wouldn't really use.
In conclusion, your writing is fine, but you should go back and edit your grammar, especially when there's dialogue. If you keep that up, then your writing will get better.
-Jongdaye
YixingsLaydy #2
Chapter 1: AWWWWW, SEHUN SOUNDS SO CUTE HERE. *0* Makes me want to take care of him. I honestly love this story already, the beginning made so sad since it was very descriptive and can really hurt a person in the heart, but after Luhan came, I just love it. Absolutely love it, and I've never read EXOxEXO member fanfic before, it's always EXOxOC. But after reading this, my mind will change. Please continue to do so, it's wonderfully written with emotions and very well organized. Hwaiting. ^^~ ♥
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