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                                   STORY BY WINTERMINTCOOKIE | REWIEWED BY IHATEYOUGOAWAY

Title (5/5)

i personally liked the title. it's not too long and catchy. it also connected with the story. good job :)

Description (7/10)

it was simple and i liked it! i can see it's from sura's point of view. but you have some mistakes in capital letters. i will

tell you in grammar section. and it would be good if you change the font a bit. like lucida grande or helvetica neue.

Plot (17/20)

the plot is great. about a soul who wants her 'ex' to move one because she died. the angst feel really got me! especially

when baekhyun visited sura's grave and when sura gave him her ring. and i can see that baekhyun truly loves sura. you

descirpt the whole thing nicely. a bit cliche, but still good. 

Originality (7/10)

 i can't say this is original, because i've read many stories similiar to this and mostly on MVs and films. a girl who got into

a car accident, in a coma, and then died. not a new thing for me. also, kim hyuna, who tried to break their relationship?

there're bunch like that in aff. honestly, i groaned on that part. a letter written by 'sura's soul' that given to baekhyun the

moment she died, it's a bit similiar to ano hana. but, you succeed to make cliche story be a good story. :>

Characterization (7.5/10)

you descript baekhyun so nicely. and i can understand how baekhyun felt when sura died,  how he couldn't move on

and his feeling for yeonmi. he has a clear reason why he couldn't move on. but, you didn't write much about sura's 

character here. why her soul didn't go to heaven? why her soul still trapped in baekhyun's world? she doesn't have

a clear reason. and yeonmi. what makes her want toknow something wrong on baekhyun? also kim hyuna. nah, i won't

say anything about hyuna because i don't think she is 'really' a character here.

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