Chapter 1: I really liked this story. Your kissing scene was a lot very hot and a lot better than some of the attempts at I've been reading lately. Even without experience, you captured the emotion felts during the action and reactions, and also remembered to show their positions and what their hands were doing. These are the things authors forget to do when writing scenes that drive me crazy, so I know when you decide to write one you'll do just fine.
Overall I thought the story was cute. It was a bit rushed, but they were drunk, so makes sense. I would really like to see how their date plays out. ^^
This was a great story!!!! I felt every emotion. EACH OTP were with who they belong with (Sorry, I am a BangLo, HimUp, and DaeJae) TILL THE END. But will read and support stories of other parings of them. BUT THIS IS WHAT I SUPPORT!!!!
I felt everything Jae, and Dae felt..SHYT I'm even excited for the date ^_^
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