salty water; barefoot

Description

 

where sungyeol fails to grow-up and stays stuck in the past. along with him, accompanies his only, and probably his only friend in the world. 

 

Foreword

 

 

a/n: i'm surprisingly lazy these days so perhaps this'll make my brain jog a little bit. 

contest: faults and flaws : infinite writing contest 

prompt: "and if I ever call you at 4am, answer, because you will have a glimpse of the only person I could ever be."

sungyeol&bffl; beach!AU; angst

does have (kind of) sensitive material--idk depends on who you are really; nothing that's going to make you drop to the floor and vomit though.

also if you are by any chance a grammar nazi you should really go away. you'd probably get frustrated lol.

did a readability thing. lol, you guys tell me if it's accurate or not: World of Literature Readability Testing Shop 

 

 

veinless
twirls and etc... I'M HAPPY THIS IS GETTING NICE FEEDBACK THANKS SO MUCH Y'ALLLL

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sendohime #1
Chapter 1: You totally slayed my mind. I tend to stay away from anything sensitive (ex. Myungsoo in GROW bc this precious baby should never have to feel so ty) or anything without conventional grammar. But gosh I'm so glad I decided to click on this.
Your take on Sungyeol's character was so different I needed to take so many steps back to piece it together. Definitely uncoventional, I'm so used to seeing a bubbly, trickster Sungyeol it was so interresting to get a no nonsense, emotionally tattered side of him.
And I'm glad you thought it was Woohyun as his best friend (I thought it was Myungsoo at first because by ship it'a almost always him and I'm like "this... doesn't feel right). I could only imagine Woohyun saying something like "people will never like you if..." because Woohyun is definitely a people pleaser. And c'mon WooYeol is awesome they're like partners in crime. I feel like friendships like theirs hardly last, especially once high school ends, so it's nice exploring the growth in that.
Towards the end, I was hoping for Sungyeol to existentially melt in the water and be infinite and wishy washy and just be everything and nothing. But living is a better idea haha, I wish the best for fictional WooYeol. Thank you for this lovely read.
coal3sc3
#2
Chapter 1: This is lovely. I love your every sentence. One's beauty may lie on their outsides, and one may lie on their insides, but yours probably on both, and as a bonus, it lies on your words too. Gosh. This is a masterpiece. *double thumbs up*
xxgdrgn_
#3
Chapter 1: I just want you to know, your words are like gold.
informantxgirl
#4
Chapter 1: Chinggu, oh chinggu, why do you do this to me? Why do you smear your perfection all over these words and commit them to a screen and ignite my many, many, salty/sweet feels?!? I hate you like the flower hates the rain, chinggu, truly! Ack, so much beauty in these words, your own kind of beauty - the filthy-lovely kind. :D I don't know if I could say I have a favorite part; you got my feels kicking even with that rather straightforward description of Sungyeol walking up the little hill to his house (that's a bit of a fairytale kinda detail, isn't it? They always live on hills or something). I love that he loves the ocean - basically a big vat of tears. And yes, Woohyun and Myungsoo might have fit the part of the friend, but I imagined Dongwoo actually, a nice guy who says nice things that can have some ambiguously philosophical meanings at times. I loved that no one other than Yeol had a name; again, isn't that like fairytales? They're always the matchstick girl or the hunter or something. And eh, forget the grammar. as long as it's beautiful and comprehensible, what does it matter? ee s, chinggu, magical realism (although heavy emphasis on the realism), theater of the absurd - i see all these in your work, with a dash of Haruki Murakami. Oh, and call me twisted, but I did not see the sensitive in this; well, the drug use maybe, but I write , so I have a high tolerance for stuff like that, lol. Now I must find this novel you recommend... :D
infinite_myeongyeol
#5
Chapter 1: oh what else can i say, this is really good! ^-^
informantxgirl
#6
I have a high tolerance for sensitive material, and no matter what it is, I am sure you will handle it beautifully and eloquently. As always, I am super looking forward to this!